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some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion. yKng
Numerous people believe that music can be a good solution to connect with people from different cultures and ages. However, there are also several people that have a different opinion about this. This essay will provide evidences as well as my own prospective to how far do I agree or disagree with this issue. For fact, people can like music from diverse genres like jazz, pop, rock, country, etc. Some people like old music while some people do not. This can be a starting point for us to see things in others prospective. Let us take a look at korean pop music that is recently has been popular worldwide and is liked by different numbers of people regardless of their ages and cultures. To the non korean citizens, they still can enjoy the music even if they have different cultures and do not understand korean. Another example is people that love 90's music although they were born in different generations, like me and my mom. To me, I like 90's music because it has good lyrics and beats. However to my mom, it could be nostalgic to her as she listened to that music in her teenage years. Nonetheless, I do agree that music can also separate people as there are music that can come as offensive to certain people. For instance, korean singer and rapper named CL made a song called MTBD back in 2014 and she was under fire because there is an Al-Quran verse from surah An-Naba as a backsound in her song. Many muslims were raged and demanded CL's a clarification. She was then apologized and stated that she would remove the Al-Quran verse and change it to another sound while decided to educate herself more to prevent this problem to happen again. After this issue, majority of people have forgived her but there were plenty of them that still in rage and even go as far as hating korean pop and korean in general. To summarize this, I do agree that music can bring people together. However, musicians should consider whether their music may offend some cultures or not. We also must respect other taste of music and should not force anyone to like your favorite music so that we could enjoy music as it is.
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good
solution to connect with
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people
from
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different
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cultures
and ages.
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people
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opinion about this. This essay will provide evidences
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own
prospective to how far do I
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or disagree with this issue.

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people
can like
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music
from diverse genres like jazz, pop, rock, country, etc.
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like
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do not. This can be a starting point for us to
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things in others prospective.
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korean
pop
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music
that is
recently has been popular worldwide and
is liked
by
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different
numbers of
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people
regardless of their ages and
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cultures
. To the non
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korean
citizens, they
still
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cultures
and do not understand
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korean
. Another example is
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people
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90's
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music
although they
were born
in
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different
generations, like me and my mom. To me, I like
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90's
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music
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because
it has
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good
lyrics and beats.
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music
in her teenage years. Nonetheless, I do
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can
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as there are
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as offensive to certain
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people
.
For instance
,
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korean
singer and rapper named CL made a song called
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MTBD
back in
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2014 and
she was under fire
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in her song.
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muslims
were raged
and demanded CL's a clarification. She was then apologized and stated that she would remove the Al-Quran verse and
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change
it to another sound while decided to educate herself more to
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this problem to happen again. After this issue, majority of
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korean
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To summarize
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music
can bring
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people
together.
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, musicians should consider whether their
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music
may offend
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some
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cultures
or not. We
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music
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that we could enjoy
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music
as it is.
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IELTS essay some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion.

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