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Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of all ages and cultures together. Do you agree with this?

Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of all ages and cultures together. Do you agree with this? 2qpM
Listening to music can be stress reliever, due to this some masses oppose, mucis have the potential to attract different ages and backgrounds together. From my perspective, music attract the audience, but not always. Consequences depend on the type of music and interest of the listener. To commence with, music stimulates the mind power and surge ability. To be precise, while enjoying music feelings of amusement comes automatically into body parts, due to this people dance on the music with others even without any relationship. Secondly, vibrations and notes, attracts the people even music is in other language. In other words, tones effect the mind which further attracts the individuals of every age towards ine floor and friendship among people begins through music. Therefore, some people reckon, music is good way to gather different tradition's together. Furthermore, music have a lot of types, it depend on interest of person in which he/she feel happiness. To explain, interest matters if one person has similarly intrest in particular music than it is difficult together people. Moreover, most of the modern music contains abusive lyrics for others traditions and people which increase enviousness among society, as a result of it classification and discrimination increase in people. Thus, music not always attract the people of society to be together and decrease classification. In conclusion, as I above mentioned, music attracts the disinct types of people under one roof, but not always there are also some problems in modern lyrics which lead in surge of classification among society.
Listening to
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mucis
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attract
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different
ages and backgrounds together. From my perspective,
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music
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attract
the audience,
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not
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always
. Consequences depend on the type of
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and interest of the listener.

To commence with,
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stimulates the mind power and surge ability. To be precise, while enjoying
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music
feelings of amusement
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comes
automatically
into body parts, due to this
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people
dance on the
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music
with others even without any relationship.
Secondly
, vibrations and notes,
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attracts
the
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people
even
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music
is in
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other
language. In
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other
words, tones effect the mind which
further
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attracts
the individuals of every age
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towards ine
floor and friendship among
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people
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through
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.
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,
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people
reckon,
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is
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good
way to gather
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different
tradition's together.

Furthermore
,
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music
have
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a lot of
types, it
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on interest of person in which he/she feel happiness. To
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, interest matters if one person has
similarly
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intrest
in particular
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than it is difficult together
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people
.
Moreover
, most of the modern
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music
contains abusive lyrics for others traditions and
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people
which increase enviousness among society,
as a result
of
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it classification
and discrimination increase in
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people
.
Thus
,
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music
not always
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attract
the
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people
of society to be together and decrease classification.

In conclusion
, as I above mentioned,
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attracts
the
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disinct
types of
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people
under one roof,
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not always there are
also
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some
problems in modern lyrics which lead in surge of classification among society.
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IELTS essay Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of all ages and cultures together. Do you agree with this?

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  American English
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