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Some people say history is one the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say history is one the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. qgmP
There are many people who have called into question the importance in today’s world of subjects like history, which do not have an immediately discernible impact on most future careers. While I think that history should still be mandatory, more practical subjects related to technology and the arts are more needed in our evolving world. The main reason that students should study some history in school is that it provides crucial insights into nations around the world that serve as springboards for later political beliefs. In America, students learn about the American Revolution, the constitution and the founding fathers periodically from elementary to high school. They learn about why the war started (so that the colonies could tax and govern themselves) as well as the great figures from history like George Washington, Thomas Jefferson, and Benjamin Franklin. Some of the principles students learn include the ideas of American exceptionalism, life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness, and the responsibility of citizens to vote in a representative democracy. Later in life, most people will lean liberal or conservative but still hold the same basic convictions about individual liberty and responsibility. By knowing the context in which these ideas emerged students can become adults with well-informed political beliefs and it will be more difficult for unscrupulous politicians to make false assertions about the past. Although history should still be taught, the practical sciences and arts should be prioritised because these are more likely to have an impact on a person’s future career. Very few students will end up with careers in history, as historians or professors, but a large percentage will work in the arts and especially the sciences. For example, in Vietnam the most popular university majors are engineering, finance, and graphic design. If schools emphasise maths at school then this will better prepare them to make calculations in complex engineering projects or when working at a bank or accountancy firm. Even learning how to draw and use colors in art class is more useful for students because of the high demand for graphic designers on websites and advertisements. Countries that devote more of their educational budget towards these practical subjects will give students a head start on a potential future career and increase their chances of having a higher standard of living. It is clear that in this case a moderate approach is best. School administrators should not remove history from the timetable but in my opinion they should devote more time and resources to the teaching of subjects related to technology and the arts. This will become ever more important as the tech industry continues to dominate the future job market.
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. While I
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related to technology and the
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are more needed in our evolving world.

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in
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is that it provides crucial insights into nations around the world that serve as springboards for later political beliefs. In America,
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students
learn about the American Revolution, the constitution and the founding fathers
periodically
from elementary to high
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school
. They learn about why the war
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started
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so
that the colonies could tax and govern themselves)
as well
as the great figures from
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history
like George Washington, Thomas Jefferson, and Benjamin Franklin.
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principles
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of American exceptionalism, life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness, and the responsibility of citizens to vote in a representative democracy. Later in life, most
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people
will lean liberal or conservative
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but
still
hold the same basic convictions about individual liberty and responsibility. By knowing the context in which these
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ideas
emerged
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students
can become adults with well-informed political beliefs and it will be more difficult for unscrupulous politicians to
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make
false assertions about the past.

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should
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, the practical sciences and
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should be
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future
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.
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in
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, as historians or professors,
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a large percentage will work in the
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arts
and
especially
the sciences.
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, in Vietnam the most popular university majors are engineering, finance, and graphic design. If
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schools
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then this will better prepare them to
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make
calculations in complex engineering projects or when working at a bank or accountancy firm. Even learning how to draw and
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use
colors in
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art
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is more useful for
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students
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because
of the high demand for graphic designers on websites and advertisements. Countries that devote more of their educational budget towards these practical
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subjects
will give
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students
a head
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on a potential
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and increase their chances of having a higher standard of living.

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that
in this case
a moderate approach is best.
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School
administrators should not remove
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history
from the timetable
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but
in my opinion they should devote more time and resources to the teaching of
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subjects
related to technology and the
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arts
. This will become ever more
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important
as the tech industry continues to dominate the
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future
job market.
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IELTS essay Some people say history is one the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history.

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