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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. R7Xk
Primary education has always played a major role in building the foundation of knowledge. Students study various subjects to enhance their understanding about different areas of life. History is one of them, which provides us knowledge about our past. Some people believe that history must be taught in the primary schools, whereas, other think that the priority should be given to the subjects like Science and Technology. I will discuss about both the views in my essay. On one hand, this subject is essential to learn about the evolution of societies and causes of change. Moreover, we also get to know about different cultures and dynasties prevalent worldwide. History compiles real life stories which further motivate many people. It also educates us about the causes of sufferings we had in the past. This knowledge can help us avoid those mistakes in the future. We generally believe that one must not dwell on the past rather should focus on the present and future. But the roots of the present and future are always linked to the past. Hence, we cannot ignore the importance of knowing about the past to create a better future. Certainly, history is beneficial to mankind. Nevertheless, the absence of its practical applications in today’s contemporary world has affected its popularity. Cramming dates and years of the past incidents kills the creativity of the learner. Today’s generation is focusing more on technological innovations for future developments. For that reason, subjects like history do not fit into the current education system. In addition, teachers use conventional methodology to teach History. Consequently, the subject becomes boring and less participative. To conclude, students often question the relevance of having a history class in the schools. But they do not understand the intensity of change this subject can bring to our lives. Every subject has its relevance and contribution in our lives. Even though, in the age of robots, it is essential to study science based subjects, in my opinion, the information about our culture and origin is equally important.
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to enhance their understanding about
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different
areas of life.
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History
is one of them, which provides us knowledge about our
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past
.
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Some
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people
believe that
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history
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must
be taught
in the primary schools, whereas, other
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think
that the priority should be
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given
to the
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subjects
like Science and Technology. I will
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discuss about both
the views in my essay.

On one hand, this
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subject
is essential to learn about the evolution of societies and causes of
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change
.
Moreover
, we
also
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get
to know about
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different
cultures and dynasties prevalent worldwide.
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History
compiles real life stories which
further
motivate
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many
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people
. It
also
educates us about the causes of sufferings we had in the
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past
. This knowledge can
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help
us avoid those mistakes in the
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future
. We
generally
believe that one
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must
not dwell on the
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past
rather
should focus on the present and
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future
.
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But
the roots of the present and
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future
are always linked to the
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past
.
Hence
, we cannot
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ignore
the importance of knowing about the
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past
to create a better future.

Certainly
,
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history
is beneficial to mankind.
Nevertheless
, the absence of its practical applications in
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today
’s contemporary world has
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affected
its popularity. Cramming dates and years of the
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past
incidents kills the creativity of the learner.
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Today
’s generation is focusing more on technological innovations for
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future
developments. For that reason,
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subjects
like
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history
do not fit into the
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current
education system.
In addition
, teachers
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use
conventional methodology to teach
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History
.
Consequently
, the
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subject
becomes boring and less
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participative
.

To conclude
, students
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often
question the relevance of having a
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history
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class
in the schools.
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But
they do not understand the intensity of
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change
this
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subject
can bring to our
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lives
. Every
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subject
has its relevance and contribution in our
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lives
.
Even though
, in the age of robots, it is essential to study science based
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subjects
, in my opinion, the information about our culture and origin is
equally
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important
.
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IELTS essay Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
5.5
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