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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. 7b7Y
There has always been healthy debate between two mind-sets of people having contrasting opinion the minority group believes history is one of the most vital subject. where's majority opine that subjects like science and technology are more vital than history. While both have. Respective merits and demerits, I shall discuss both views in the fourth coming paragraph and share my opinion at the end as asked. It can be seen that minority group is more concern about history cause it contains glory of our freedom fighters and also about the kings who always there to protect their kingdom they believe that every undergraduate need to know about our rich history and also take inspiration from them There are lots of great kings like maha rana pratap who have always dream to make powerful country. There are lots of freedom fighters like. Bhagat Singh who gave their whole life towards the nation he always wants free INDIA. undergraduate get motivation from them to contribute towards. Our country and towards their society. Whereas, on other hand from larger group view technology is more vital than history they thought that in near future technology and science Take off in full pace and that time history is not that vital. Tech like mobile, rockets and space missions are in trending. Undergraduate need prepare them self for this kind of task that's the reason they gave too much importance to technology. In my opinion science and technology is vital but we also need to understand that our rich history also disappear. We need to save Our history and give knowledge about it to undergraduate to get it alive.
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having contrasting opinion the minority group believes
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history
is one

of the most
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vital
subject.
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where
's majority opine that subjects like science and
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technology
are more
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vital
than
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history
. While both have.

Respective merits and demerits, I shall discuss both views in the fourth coming paragraph and share my opinion at the
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end
as asked.

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seen
that minority group is more concern about
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history
cause it contains glory of our freedom fighters and
also
about the kings who

always there to protect their kingdom they believe that every
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undergraduate
need to know about our rich
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history
and
also
take inspiration from them

There are lots of great kings like
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maha
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rana
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pratap
who have always
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dream
to
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powerful country. There are lots of freedom fighters like.

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Bhagat
Singh who gave their whole life towards the nation he always wants free INDIA.
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undergraduate
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get
motivation from them to contribute towards.

Our country and towards their society.

Whereas, on other hand from larger group view
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technology
is more
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vital
than
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history
they
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thought
that in near future
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technology
and science

Take off in full pace and that time
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history
is not that
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vital
. Tech like mobile, rockets and space missions are in trending.
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Undergraduate
need

prepare them self for this kind of task that's the reason they gave too much importance to technology.

In my opinion science and
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technology
is
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vital
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but
we
also
need to understand that our rich
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history
also
disappear. We need to
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save


Our
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history
and give knowledge about it to
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undergraduate
to
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get
it alive.
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IELTS essay Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History.

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  American English
10 paragraphs
273 words
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