Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people said studying history is useful in what extend do you agree or disagree? What solution do you have for young people in modern world

Some people said studying history is useful in what extend What solution do you have for young people in modern world 0EXAO
There are beliefs about importance of history studying for better performance of new generation in modern world, i definitely agree and i am going to reveal my point of view. There are many complicated circumstances to face with when a young adult starting to become an active member of the society, and being flawless in all of them is beyond the borders for inexperienced person. This is where history can become a mentor and sheds the light on rough situations because it gaves us the opportunity to collect many experiencees about similar situations without living them only by studying, although it is abvious we are talk about similarity not exact circumstances and modern lives are different from the ancient one, but we can use some part of a historical event which is more relevant to human nature and reactions, since the steady parts of our humanity it can be useful, for example, studying about Trojan Horse, in modern world maybe there is no the big horse with enemies soldiers in it but our knowledge about this part of history can aware us about some dangerous thing with a peaceful appearance. As a solution for young people better function, we can provide workshops to them with useful subjects that are similar to daily life, this can be a source of new experiences without truly living them, this is not only informative but also harmless so we can repeat this form of workshops over and over with different subjects or even with dangerous subjects which experienced them in real lives can be life threatening, for instance, a workshop about hard times people maybe spend during a bank robbery and keep ourselves safe is only a workshop but real situation can put us in real danger. To sum up, history is a good teacher and it is not only a repeated word, learning about the past and humans lives can be considered as a gift for simpler life in sophisticated modern world, so we should accept it with open arm, also we can reach our younger one lives with workshops about real world only by roleplay.
There are beliefs about importance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
history
studying for better performance of new generation in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
definitely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
and
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
am going to reveal my point of view.

There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
complicated circumstances to face with when a young adult starting to become an active member of the society, and being flawless in all of them is beyond the borders for inexperienced person. This is where
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
history
can become a mentor and sheds the light on rough situations
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it
Possible spelling mistake found.
gaves
us the opportunity to collect
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "experiences", the plural form of the noun 'experience'?
experiencees
about similar situations without living them
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
by studying, although it is
Possible spelling mistake found.
abvious
we are talk about similarity not exact circumstances and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
from the ancient one,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
part of a historical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
which is more relevant to human nature and reactions, since the steady parts of our humanity it can be useful,
for example
, studying about Trojan Horse, in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
maybe there is
Did you mean "now" (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
no
the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
horse with enemies soldiers in it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
our knowledge about this part of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
history
can aware us about
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
thing with a peaceful appearance.

As a solution for young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
better function, we can provide
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
workshops
to them with useful subjects that are similar to daily life, this can be a source of new experiences without
truly
living them, this is not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
informative
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
harmless
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
we can repeat this form of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
workshops
over and over with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
subjects or even with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
subjects which experienced them in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
real
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
can be life threatening,
for instance
, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
workshop
about
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
times
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
maybe spend during a bank robbery and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
ourselves safe is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
workshop
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
real
situation can put us in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
real
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
.

To sum up,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
history
is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
teacher and it is not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
a repeated word, learning about the past and humans
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
can
be considered
as a gift for simpler life in sophisticated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
we should accept it with open arm,
also
we can reach our younger one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
workshops
about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
real
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
by
Possible spelling mistake found.
roleplay
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some people said studying history is useful in what extend What solution do you have for young people in modern world

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts