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Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully Others disagree Discuss both views and give you opinion v.2

Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully Others disagree 2
The utilization of leisure time is always depends on individual nature and personal preference. To which, a few people love to organize a timetable for the things they want to do during time off while others do not believe in planning and they choose to do whatever comes on their mind first. In my opinion, it is sometimes acceptable to spend free time carelessly. To begin with, planning a spare time gives crystal clear understanding about what can be achieved in the particular duration of time, rather than wandering over things mindlessly. It allows people to identify areas where they really should focus, which eventually gives confidence and on completion, a sense of accomplishment. For instance, people who plan their vacation well and in advance tend to enjoy more than one who doesn’t. On the other hand, lack of planning only result into procrastination and prevent from doing any activity at all. Thus, proper planning is essential and beneficial to take full advantage of time off. However, people are not always keen on participating in several events in their free time and they want to take life as surprise. For them, planning is simple overburden, which they really want to avoid on their time off from work and choose to go with the flow that embarks in their ways. Furthermore, it provide them time to focus only on few most important activities, which extremely enjoy instead of taking pressure to complete multiple tasks during leisure time. For instance, most individual just love to read their favorite novel during the whole time and they don’t seem to need any planning. Thus, planning a free time is simply a waste of time for many persons. In conclusion, both the approaches have pros and cons, so people can choose however they want to spend their time, but to use free time wisely, one must have careful planning.
The utilization of leisure
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is always depends on individual nature and personal preference. To which, a few
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people
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love
to organize a timetable for the things they
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want
to do during
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time
off while others do not believe in
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planning and
they choose to do whatever
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comes
on their mind
first
. In my opinion, it is
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sometimes
acceptable to spend
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free
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time
carelessly
.

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begin
with,
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planning
a spare
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time
gives crystal
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clear
understanding about what can
be achieved
in the particular duration of
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time
,
rather
than wandering over things
mindlessly
. It
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allows
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people
to identify areas where they
really
should focus, which
eventually
gives confidence and on completion, a sense of accomplishment.
For instance
,
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people
who plan their vacation well and in advance tend to enjoy more than one who doesn’t.
On the other hand
, lack of
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planning
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only
result into procrastination and
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prevent
from doing any activity at all.
Thus
, proper
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planning
is essential and beneficial to take full advantage of
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time
off.

However
,
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people
are not always keen on participating in several
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events
in their
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free
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time and
they
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want
to take life as surprise. For them,
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planning
is simple overburden, which they
really
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want
to avoid on their
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time
off from work and choose to
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go with
the flow that embarks in their ways.
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time
to focus
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on few most
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important
activities, which
extremely
enjoy
instead
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time
.
For instance
, most individual
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just
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love
to read their favorite novel during the whole
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time and
they don’t seem to need any
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planning
.
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,
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planning
a
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time
is
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for
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persons.

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people
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,
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time
wisely
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have careful
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13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully Others disagree 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
6.0
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