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Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully. Others choose not to make any plans at all for their free time. Compare the benefits of planning free-time activities with the benefits of not making plans. v.6

Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully. Others choose not to make any plans at all for their free time. Compare the benefits of planning free-time activities with the benefits of not making plans. v. 6
It is a fact that every individual spend his/her free time differently, as a group of people choose to spend their leisure time without any plan at all, while others prefer to spend it with agenda and schedule. Planned or unplanned leisure activities have their own positive sides but I prefer to have a planned free time activities and the following essay will discuss them in details. To begin with, some people prefer to spend their leisure activities freely, without any schedules. They believe that free time activities should be totally different from their daily activities, whereas they are full of routine activities, tight deadlines and busy schedules. They believe that leisure time should be spent in doing anything they like doing that time, and they could do it as long as they like. For example, some people prefer sunbath activity at the beach during holiday periods, and they prefer to do it without any time limit. They will end their sunbathing activities after they are satisfied. For a number of reasons, another group of people believe that free time activities would be more effective and efficient if they plan it. Firstly, by doing some preparation, they already have the agenda for the day on what to do, what to see and how will they travel to those places, therefore they could visit more attractive and unique places during their holiday time.   Secondly, a planned holiday would definitely save more budgets. People who planned their holiday time could book airline tickets and accommodations from an earlier period.   As a result, they get cheaper prices for aeroplane tickets and the hotel's room rate as well. In conclusion, it is a fact that some people prefer to plan their holiday or leisure time, while others choose not to plan it. Each side has its own advantages, but I personally choose to have a planned holiday time, as I could see more attractive places during that time and save more money.
It is a fact that every individual
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his/her
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free
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time
differently
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people
choose to
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spend
their
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leisure
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time
without any
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plan
at all, while others
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prefer
to
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spend
it with agenda and schedule.
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Planned
or unplanned
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leisure
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activities
have their
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own
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positive
sides
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but
I
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prefer
to have a
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planned
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free
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time
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activities
and the following essay will discuss them in
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details
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To
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with,
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some
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people
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prefer
to
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their
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leisure
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activities
freely
, without any schedules. They believe that
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free
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time
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activities
should be
totally
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different
from their daily
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activities
, whereas they are full of routine
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activities
, tight deadlines and busy schedules. They believe that
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leisure
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time
should
be spent
in doing anything they like doing that
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time
, and they could do it as long as they like.
For example
,
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some
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people
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prefer
sunbath
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activity
at the beach during
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holiday
periods, and they
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prefer
to do it without any
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time
limit. They will
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end
their sunbathing
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activities
after they
are satisfied
.

For a number of reasons, another group of
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people
believe that
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free
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time
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activities
would be more effective and efficient if they
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plan
it.
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, by doing
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some
preparation, they already have the agenda for the day on what to do, what to
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see
and how will they travel to those places,
therefore
they could visit more attractive and unique places during their
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holiday
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time
.
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Secondly
, a
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planned
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holiday
would definitely save more budgets.
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People
who
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planned
their
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holiday
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time
could book airline tickets and accommodations from an earlier period.
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As a result
, they
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get
cheaper prices for
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aeroplane
tickets and the hotel's room rate
as well
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In conclusion
, it is a fact that
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people
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prefer
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plan
their
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holiday
or
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leisure
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time
, while others choose not to
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plan
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own
advantages,
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I
personally
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planned
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holiday
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time
, as I could
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see
more attractive places during that
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time
and save more money.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
62Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully. Others choose not to make any plans at all for their free time. Compare the benefits of planning free-time activities with the benefits of not making plans. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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