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Some people prefer to live in a big city. Others think it is better to live in a small town. Discuss both views.

Some people prefer to live in a big city. Others think it is better to live in a small town. N5Qj
Nowadays, most people prefer live in the big city. First of all, one of the important issues in the big city is medical services. In the big town, there are numerous hospitals and clinics also the presence of doctors who specialize in various fields is one of the best advantages of the big city. While in the small town there are fewer doctors. Secondly, shopping malls have always been a place to meet the needs of the people. Nevertheless, equipped shopping malls have been replaced by small local shops also some of the major centers have amusement parks and amenities that create better conditions for people. However, these centers are still being developed to make trading conditions easier.
Nowadays, most
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big
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First of all
, one of the
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important
issues in the
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big
city is medical services. In the
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big
town, there are numerous hospitals and clinics
also
the presence of doctors who specialize in various fields is one of the best advantages of the
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big
city.
“While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
in the
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small
town there are fewer doctors.
Secondly
, shopping malls have always been a place to
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meet
the needs of the
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people
.
Nevertheless
, equipped shopping malls have
been replaced
by
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small
local shops
also
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some of the
major centers have amusement parks and amenities that create better conditions for
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people
.
However
, these centers are
still
being developed
to
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make
trading conditions easier.

IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a big city. Others think it is better to live in a small town.

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118 words
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