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SOME PEOPLE PREFER RURAL LİFE AND THE OTHERS PREFER LIVING IN THE CITIES. WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT THEIR PREFERENCES. WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES ABOUT THIS SITUATION v.1

SOME PEOPLE PREFER RURAL LİFE AND THE OTHERS PREFER LIVING IN THE CITIES. WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT THEIR PREFERENCES. WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES ABOUT THIS SITUATION v. 1
In the modern world, many individuals have a chance to choose the place, where they live. In this regard, there is an opinion that living in big cities offer many opportunities for its dwellers. However, others feel that rural dwellers can find peace and quiet. To begin with, the life of big cities can offer many possibilities for individuals, such as receiving a good education, visiting popular city spots and enjoying with city amenities and facilities. For example, town dwellers can receive a good healthcare service than the dwellers of rural areas. However, the rural life also has many advantages, such as enjoying the breathtaking view of nature and mountains. In these reasons, many people are willing to live in such kinds of places. To illustrate, many people return to the rural communities, when they get retired. There is no denying that lives in urban areas also has several disadvantages. One of them is pollution. It is widely known that due to the pollution in cities, individuals are suffering. That is to say, unclear air is causing many diseases. A good illustration of this is asthma, which is spreading heavy in the towns. However, living in the countryside can be challenging too. In this reason, some people believe that living in the towns is preferable. To illustrate, getting up early in order to feed the domestic animals and doing physically demanding works are challenging for the people, who are willing to live in the villages. In conclusion, although there is many advantages and disadvantages of both city and village, it is widely believed that individuals can enjoy the life with both of them. That is to say, people can find an enjoyable activity independently where they live.
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individuals
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education, visiting popular city spots and enjoying with city amenities and facilities.
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healthcare service than the
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advantages, such as enjoying the breathtaking view of nature and mountains. In these reasons,
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There is no denying that
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,
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are suffering.
That is
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diseases. A
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illustration of this is asthma, which is spreading heavy in the towns.
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, living in the countryside can be challenging too. In this reason,
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believe that living in the towns is preferable. To illustrate, getting up early in order to feed the domestic animals and doing
physically
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people
, who are willing to
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live
in the villages.

In conclusion
, although there is
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advantages and disadvantages of both city and village, it is
widely
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individuals
can enjoy the life with both of them.
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can find an enjoyable activity
independently
where they
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.
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IELTS essay SOME PEOPLE PREFER RURAL LİFE AND THE OTHERS PREFER LIVING IN THE CITIES. WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT THEIR PREFERENCES. WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES ABOUT THIS SITUATION v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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