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Some people lived close to their parent while some lives a far from their parent what are the advantages and disadvantage of both

Some people lived close to their parent while some lives a far from their parent what are the advantages and disadvantage of both n61q7
Recently, it is an obvious fact that undergraduate's abodes close to their loved ones while others decide to be far from their parents. It can be seen that both have merits and demerits. living with loved ones increased the bonds among family members and also promote support. However, no privacy is attached to this. In contrast, away from home encouraged independence and a sense of responsibility while boredom and loneliness are the most common problems seen in this category of people. Firstly, residing with ones family members increase the bonds. It encourages the rapport between an individual and other member's of the family to be effective and promote cordial relationship among family members. This allow a person to relate freely and also ventilates ones mind and also it improves the support from members of the family which include financial and moral that might be absent when living alone. For instance, a Tanzanian student who came to Nigeria for her master's program in Nigeria was able to enjoyed her stay with the fund's she normally gets weekly from her aunt who she's living with. Conversely one of the advantage of staying away is the sense of responsibility and independence it promotes. A person who stayed alone will avoid lavish spending because the person will be aware of all the bill's such as electricity bill, security bill and all that he will have to pay for. Since the person is aware that his staying alone he will be accountable and committed in spending. On the other hand, one of the cons of living with family is the fact that no privacy is seen because family members will want to invade in every affairs of an individual. For example, female undergraduate who is staying with her relations will not be free to invites her male partner for visit especially when any member of the family is around. In contrast, away from home results into loneliness and boredom. it increases the risk of mental illness such as depression. This makes a person to think irrelevantly and also prevent one from sharing his/her burden or challenges. For instance, based on African statistics journal, living alone accounted for 80% of depression in young adults. In conclusion, I would maintained that living with family and living alone have both advantages and disadvantages.
Recently, it is an obvious fact that undergraduate's abodes close to their
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loved
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while others decide to be far from their parents. It can be
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seen
that both have merits and demerits.
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living
with
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loved
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ones
increased the bonds among
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family
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members
and
also
promote support.
However
, no privacy
is attached
to this.
In contrast
, away from home encouraged independence and a sense of responsibility while boredom and loneliness are the most common problems
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seen
in this category of
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people
.

Firstly
, residing with
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ones
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family
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members
increase the bonds. It encourages the rapport between an individual and other
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member's
of the
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family
to be effective and promote cordial relationship among
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family
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members
. This
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allow
a
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person
to relate
freely
and
also
ventilates
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ones
mind and
also
it
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improves
the support from
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members
of the
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family
which include financial and moral that might be absent when
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living
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alone
.
For instance
, a Tanzanian student
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who
came to Nigeria for her master's program in Nigeria was able to enjoyed her stay with the fund's she
normally
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gets
weekly from her aunt
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who
she's
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living
with.
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Conversely
one of the advantage of staying away is the sense of responsibility and independence it promotes. A
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person
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who
stayed
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alone
will avoid lavish spending
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because
the
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person
will be aware of all the bill's such as electricity bill, security bill and all that he will
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have to
pay for. Since the
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person
is aware that his staying
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alone
he will be accountable and committed in spending.

On the other hand
, one of the cons of
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living
with
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family
is the fact that no privacy is
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seen
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because
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family
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members
will want to invade in every
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affairs
of an individual.
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, female undergraduate
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who
is staying with her relations will not be free to
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invites
her male partner for visit
especially
when any
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member
of the
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family
is around.
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, away from home results into loneliness and boredom.
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it
increases the
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risk
of mental illness such as depression. This
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makes
a
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person
to
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think
irrelevantly
and
also
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prevent
one from sharing his/her burden or challenges.
For instance
, based on African statistics journal,
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living
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alone
accounted for 80% of depression in young adults.

In conclusion
, I would
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maintained
that
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living
with
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family
and
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living
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alone
have both advantages and disadvantages.
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IELTS essay Some people lived close to their parent while some lives a far from their parent what are the advantages and disadvantage of both

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
385 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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