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Some people like to spend their leisure time after work with co-workers while others prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some people like to spend their leisure time after work with co-workers while others prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life. Jp8k
After finishing work, many people strive to carve out an independent private life and therefore eschew meeting colleagues socially. In my opinion, strong bonds with co-workers are justifiably common but it is more important to have a stable network of friends outside work. The main advantage of fraternising with other employees after work is convenience. Employees get off work at the same time and it is easy to make plans. Most workers chat with each about their plans for the evening and then invite each other to get a drink, go to dinner, play sport or catch a movie. Since colleagues work together all day, they have a good idea of each other’s personality and will naturally congregate with the characters and groups they are predisposed towards. This organic process of meeting up with their close friends at work can quickly become an entrenched habit to look forward to at the end of the workday. Nonetheless, a varied social life is crucial in order to maintain better mental health. Conversations with co-workers inevitably turn to office related gossip and gripes about work. These self-serving and repetitive dialogues do little more than weakly reinforce one’s self-esteem. When talking with an old school friend or former co-worker one is more likely to forget about work and delve into other subjects. The result is relief of work-related stress and freedom from reinforcement of your inner drives to compare, belittle, gossip, and complain. Over time, the mental toll of being immersed in work the entire day can lead to feelings of depression and frustration, while the opposite is true of those who compartmentalise work and social life. In conclusion, spending one’s leisure time with a wider sphere of friends is key to good mental health. As people today become increasingly isolated, it is especially important to have a secure group of friends beyond the workplace.
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it is more
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important
to have a stable network of
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outside work.

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fraternising
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employees after
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is convenience. Employees
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off
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at the same time and it is easy to
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other
to
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a drink, go to dinner, play sport or catch a movie. Since colleagues
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together all day, they have a
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of each
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other’s
personality and will
naturally
congregate with the characters and groups they
are predisposed
towards. This organic process of meeting up with their close
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friends
at
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can
quickly
become an entrenched habit to look forward to at the
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end
of the workday.

Nonetheless, a varied social life is crucial in order to maintain better mental health. Conversations with co-workers
inevitably
turn to office related gossip and gripes about
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work
. These self-serving and repetitive dialogues do
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little
more than
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reinforce one’s self-esteem. When talking with an
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old
school
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friend
or former co-worker one is more likely to forget about
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work
and delve into
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other
subjects. The result is relief of work-related
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stress
and freedom from reinforcement of your inner drives to compare, belittle, gossip, and complain. Over time, the mental toll of
being immersed
in
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work
the entire day can lead to feelings of depression and frustration, while the opposite is true of those who
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compartmentalise
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work
and social life.

In conclusion
, spending one’s leisure time with a wider sphere of
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friends
is key to
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good
mental health. As
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people
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today
become
increasingly
isolated, it is
especially
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important
to have a secure group of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
beyond the workplace.
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IELTS essay Some people like to spend their leisure time after work with co-workers while others prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life.

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