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some people like doing work by hand

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- When people work by hand, the risk of damage is very high. If they don't pay attention carefully during work, parts of body can gone. For example, long time ago, employees of a cannery in steveston, canada, worked by hand. In fact, it was very common that the employees lost their fingers, hands, and other parts of body. Eventually, machines were introduced to the cannery, and, the number of injury people began to decrease. - People can get tired, frustated, bored, or other conditions that affect their work, whereas machine can't. When machines are used, they will produce the same products without any damage. On contrary, no one can make two identical products by hand. There must be a different, whether in shape, condition, size, etc. - In conclusion, machines have many great features that are imposible for human to compete it. They have many briliant features, such as: security, neatness, and speed. Thus, working with machine allows people to do better than working by hand.
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common that the employees lost their fingers,
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Eventually
,
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were introduced
to the cannery, and, the number of injury
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people
began to decrease.

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, they will produce the same products without any damage. On contrary, no one can
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great features that are
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briliant
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IELTS essay some people like doing work by hand

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
164 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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