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Some people in the developed countries refuse to be inoculated against diseases, especially Covid-19. Why do you think they made that decision? What effects could it cause?

Some people in the developed countries refuse to be inoculated against diseases, especially Covid-19. Why do you think they made that decision? What effects could it cause? lxlA9
Vaccines were born as a measure to prevent the spread of viruses and protect humanity from dangerous diseases. However, in developed countries, there is a situation of refusal to vaccinate against epidemics, especially now when we have to fight covid 19. The reason for the above decision and its unpredictable consequences will be discussed in the essay. There are thousands of reasons for refusing an injection, but the biggest reason is probably the side effects after the injection. Any method cannot avoid risks and neither can vaccines. Side effects only appear in a small number of people after vaccination, but it also causes a lot of confusion for people and fear of injection. As a result, people in prosperous countries think that vaccines are dangerous and they disapprove of vaccination even though it is the policy set forth by the government. The second reason is probably rooted in the origin of the vaccine. People from more developed countries are skeptical about vaccines that are not from their own country, they think it is only effective in those countries and may not be suitable for people in their country, so they turn down. A typical example is in the covid 19 epidemic when developed countries are afraid of a vaccine against corona despite the government's continuous reassurances about its safety. Failure to vaccinate has unpredictable consequences. The first is that individuals who do not receive vaccines, will not have more immunity and resistance to protect themselves, leading to when they contract without them being able to fight the virus that causes the disease, which seriously may be fatal. Secondly, for the community, the world will not become herd immunity if there is still a spread. The more it spreads, the more people get infected. For instance, The rate of covid 19 cases in Europe has always led the world due to the laxity and indifference of the people in disease prevention.
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Vaccines
were born
as a measure to
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prevent
the spread of viruses and protect humanity from
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dangerous
diseases.
However
, in developed
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countries
, there is a situation of refusal to vaccinate against epidemics,
especially
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now
when we
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have to
fight
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covid 19
. The
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reason
for the above decision and its unpredictable consequences will
be discussed
in the essay.

There are thousands of
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reasons
for refusing an injection,
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but
the biggest
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reason
is
probably
the side effects after the injection. Any method cannot avoid
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risks
and neither can
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vaccines
. Side effects
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only
appear in a
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small
number of
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people
after vaccination,
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but
it
also
causes
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a lot of
confusion for
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people
and fear of injection.
As a result
,
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people
in prosperous
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countries
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think
that
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vaccines
are
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dangerous and
they disapprove of vaccination
even though
it is the policy set forth by the
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government
. The second
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reason
is
probably
rooted in the origin of the
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vaccine
.
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People
from more developed
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countries
are skeptical about
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vaccines
that are not from their
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own
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country
, they
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think
it is
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only
effective in those
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countries
and may not be suitable for
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people
in their
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country
,
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so
they turn down. A typical example is in the
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covid 19
epidemic when developed
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countries
are afraid of a
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vaccine
against corona despite the
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government
's continuous reassurances about its safety.

Failure to vaccinate has unpredictable consequences. The
first
is that individuals who do not receive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vaccines
, will not have more immunity and resistance to protect themselves, leading to when they contract without them being able to fight the virus that causes the disease, which
seriously
may be fatal.
Secondly
, for the community, the world will not become herd immunity if there is
still
a spread. The more it spreads, the more
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
infected.
For instance
, The rate of
Did you mean "COVID-19" or the alternative spelling "Covid-19" (= coronavirus)?
covid 19
cases in Europe has always led the world due to the laxity and indifference of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in disease prevention.
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IELTS essay Some people in the developed countries refuse to be inoculated against diseases, especially Covid-19. Why do you think they made that decision? What effects could it cause?

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