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Some people have unhealthy diet and do not do any physical exercises. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this issue?

Some people have unhealthy diet and do not do any physical exercises. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this issue? nxMWR
Ever increasing number of people are having an unhealthy eating lifestyle these days. Besides, most of them do not do physical exercises as well. One of the main reasons for these can be lack of time, as many people have to spend significantly large part of their waking hours at work. In my view, employers and government are more responsible to solve this issue more than individuals. Admittedly, people have to work in order to earn a living. Consequently, they spend much time in their workplaces. In some cases, people need to commute for a couple of hours, and, naturally, they do not have enough time to prepare a healthy meal after coming back home. To solve this, governments should urge employers to allow their workers to have flexible timetable, which encourages them to have healthy food. A good example of this is Japan, where commuting hours are considered as working hours, and people do not need to leave early or come late, because of travelling to work. Lack of exercise can be caused by insufficient sports facilities and time management to some extent. In other words, in some countries many gyms and fitness centers are in central parts of cities, and, simply, people do not want to go back from their living places after the working day. A probable solution would be to organize gyms in workplaces or residential areas to encourage people to do workouts by spending minimum amount of time for the amount of time for the road. To conclude, authorities and organisations should feel the responsibility of their citizens and workers, and do everything possible to push them to have active lifestyle. By this I do not mean that people should not do anything about their health. In fact, they ought to use all the opportunities available to be good condition.
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Ever increasing
number of
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people
are having an unhealthy eating lifestyle these days.
Besides
, most of them do not do physical exercises
as well
. One of the main reasons for these can be lack of
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time
, as
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many
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people
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have to
spend
significantly
large part of their waking
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hours
at work. In my view, employers and
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government
are more responsible to solve this issue more than individuals.

Admittedly
,
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people
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have to
work in order to earn a living.
Consequently
, they spend much
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time
in their workplaces. In
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some
cases,
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people
need to commute for a couple of
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hours
, and,
naturally
, they do not have
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enough
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time
to prepare a healthy meal after coming back home. To solve this,
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governments
should urge employers to
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allow
their workers to have flexible timetable, which encourages them to have healthy food. A
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good
example of this is Japan, where commuting
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hours
are considered
as working
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hours
, and
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people
do not need to
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leave
early or
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come
late,
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because
of travelling to work.

Lack of exercise can
be caused
by insufficient sports facilities and
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management to
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some
extent.
In other words
, in
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some
countries
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many
gyms and fitness centers are in central parts of cities, and,
simply
,
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people
do not want to go back from their living places after the working day. A probable solution would be to organize gyms in workplaces or residential areas to encourage
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people
to do workouts by spending minimum amount of
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time
for the amount of
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time
for the road.

To conclude
, authorities and
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organisations
should feel the responsibility of their citizens and workers, and do everything possible to push them to have active lifestyle. By this I do not mean that
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people
should not do anything about their health. In fact, they ought to
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use
all the opportunities available to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
condition.
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IELTS essay Some people have unhealthy diet and do not do any physical exercises. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this issue?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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