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"Some people feel that working from home is easily as productive, if not more so, than going to an office on a regular basis, while others feel less work is accomplished without the benefit of an official workspace." Which point of view in the statement above do you agree with more? Discuss your answer in essay form, drawing on personal examples and experience to justify your point of view.

"Some people feel that working from home is easily as productive, if not more so, than going to an office on a regular basis, while others feel less work is accomplished without the benefit of an official workspace. " Which point of view in the statement above do you agree with more? Discuss your answer in essay form, drawing on personal examples and experience to justify your point of view. bB26
I choose the second option. For me, I think working from home is less effective. During these days, I feel really stress and confused. My pace becomes more unstable day by day. My brain becomes less organized. The external factor is because there are a lot of distraction such as smartphone and noises. Personally, I dislike noise very much because I need a calm environment for me to focus. More noises means more distraction and stress. Sometimes, it also causes headache. For smartphone, as we all know, there are a lot of interesting things in it. I most likely spend my time on my smartphone because I'm bored. Besides the external factors, there are also internal factors such as my personality and my health. Being on the laptop for a long time makes my eyes and body hurt. Before working from home, I have quite a healthy eyes, and now I think my eyes really need a break. My body hurts because I spend more time sitting down than moving around. My sleep cycle also ruined. I have a little bit shy personality. I barely can ask for a question. I also barely answer a question. I tend to wait for the teacher to call my name. I'm also afraid of making a mistakes. If I made a mistake, I tend to think about it for a long time, even years. Last thing, I can't understand well. I am a not so smart person. I currently struggling to understand subjects such as mathematic, physic, chemistry, and biology. There also like so many homework. Also, when there is a group project, it is hard to do it together because I'm not a social person and it is hard to do a group project online. It is easier to do if we can meet eye to eye. I know that everybody has their own preference. I'm saying my opinion not because I don't respect the first option. I still respect the first option. I know some of my friends if I asked them, they will choose the first option. But for me, I choose the second option. But, as a human being, I can't control today's situation as I want. I just have to be patient and do my best on anything that I do.
I choose the second
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working from home is less effective. During these days, I feel
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stress
and confused. My pace becomes more unstable day by day. My brain becomes less organized.

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distraction such as smartphone and noises.
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stress
.
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Sometimes
, it
also
causes headache. For smartphone, as we all know, there are
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a lot of
interesting things in it. I most likely spend my
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time
on my smartphone
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because
I'm bored.

Besides
the external factors, there are
also
internal factors such as my personality and my health. Being on the laptop for a long
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eyes
and body hurt.
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working from home, I have quite a healthy
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eyes
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really
need a break. My body hurts
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because
I spend more
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sitting down than moving around. My sleep cycle
also
ruined. I have a
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little bit
shy personality. I
barely
can
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ask for
a question.
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I
also
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answer a question.
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tend to wait for the teacher to call my name.
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'm
also
afraid of making
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. If I made a mistake, I tend to
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about it for a long
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, even years.

Last thing, I can't understand well. I am a not
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smart person. I
currently
struggling to understand subjects such as mathematic, physic, chemistry, and biology. There
also
like
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so
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.
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, when there is a group project, it is
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to do it together
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I'm not a social person and it is
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hard
to do a group project online. It is easier to do if we can
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meet
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eye
to eye.

I know that everybody has their
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preference. I'm saying my opinion not
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I don't respect the
first
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.
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I
still
respect the
first
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.
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I
know
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of my friends if I asked them, they will choose the
first
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.
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for me, I choose the second
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.
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, as a human being, I can't control
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today
's situation as I want. I
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be patient and do my best on anything that I do.
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IELTS essay "Some people feel that working from home is easily as productive, if not more so, than going to an office on a regular basis, while others feel less work is accomplished without the benefit of an official workspace. " Which point of view in the statement above do you agree with more? Discuss your answer in essay form, drawing on personal examples and experience to justify your point of view.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
383 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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