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Some people feel that the use of animals for scientific and commercial research, such as testing medicines and cosmetics, is unnecessary and cruel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people feel that the use of animals for scientific and commercial research, such as testing medicines and cosmetics, is unnecessary and cruel. with this opinion? Wqa1e
Owing to the rapid development of modern sciences, especially in the aspect of genetic engineering, some critics dispute that some studies are brutal and needless when wildlife creatures have been utilized for the purpose of either science or commerce. I partially agree with this statement that this is a kind of uncivilized behaviour, but it might be necessary for the progression of human civilization. On one hand, it is undoubted that the usage of animals in academic study is not only savage but also immoral, extremely overriding the proper right of other lives. In view of the perspective of equality for all creatures throughout the world, there is a consensus that human beings should not be allowed to carry out any activity that will create tortures towards the testers. For example, it is unbelievably miserable that the first cloning sheep in the world, Dolly, completed its short-term life painful congenital diseases just simply because of a non-sense scientific experiment. On the other hand, never has it been crucial for the utilization of nonhuman testing to accomplish a number of experiments which could essentially contribute to the scientific progression as well as civilization development. In addition, there may be an expectation of mankind to exceed the limited borders of science, broadening horizons to benefit the human world. Taking medicines testing, for instance, it is highly suggestive that particular primates, such as gorillas or chimpanzees, have been using in the last few decades due to the fact that they are genetically close to humans. To conclude, I recognize that using animals in some experimental researches are inhuman and unacceptably cruel due to the disregard of the right in all creatives whilst I acknowledge the necessity of animal testing regarding the improvement of human civilization since there are no alternative choices to be selected. Therefore, I believe that an appropriate regulation should be implemented to ensure the animals in the research with minimal suffering.
Owing to the rapid development of modern sciences,
especially
in the aspect of genetic engineering,
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some
critics dispute that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
studies are brutal and needless when wildlife creatures have
been utilized
for the purpose of either science or commerce. I
partially
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agree
with this statement that this is a kind of uncivilized
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behaviour
,
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but
it might be necessary for the progression of
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human
civilization.

On one hand, it
is undoubted
that the usage of
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animals
in academic study is not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
savage
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but
also
immoral,
extremely
overriding the proper right of other
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lives
. In view of the perspective of equality for all creatures throughout the world, there is a consensus that
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human
beings should not be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
to carry out any activity that will create tortures towards the testers.
For example
, it is
unbelievably
miserable that the
first
cloning sheep in the world, Dolly, completed its short-term life painful congenital diseases
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
simply
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because
of a non-sense scientific experiment.

On the other hand
, never has it been crucial for the utilization of nonhuman testing to accomplish a number of experiments which could
essentially
contribute to the scientific progression
as well
as civilization development.
In addition
, there may be an expectation of mankind to exceed the limited borders of science, broadening horizons to benefit the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
world. Taking medicines testing,
for instance
, it is
highly
suggestive that particular primates, such as gorillas or chimpanzees, have been using in the last few decades due to the fact that they are
genetically
close to humans.

To conclude
, I recognize that using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
experimental researches are inhuman and
unacceptably
cruel due to the disregard of the right in all creatives whilst I acknowledge the necessity of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
testing regarding the improvement of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
civilization since there are no alternative choices to
be selected
.
Therefore
, I believe that an appropriate regulation should
be implemented
to ensure the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
in the research with minimal suffering.
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IELTS essay Some people feel that the use of animals for scientific and commercial research, such as testing medicines and cosmetics, is unnecessary and cruel. with this opinion?

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