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Some people feel that global warming should be dealt with by governments. Others feel that it is responsibility of individuals in society to solve the problem. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people feel that global warming should be dealt with by governments. Others feel that it is responsibility of individuals in society to solve the problem. WeWW
To reduce the increased temperature due to human's activities on earth must be halt with the contribution of the authorities. Although, this notion is favoured by some part of the society, others have a counter argument that to tackle this serious issue people have to take some actions on their own. This essay will discuss both aspects in the upcoming paragraphs before reaching to a concrete decision with my viewpoint. To begin with, the government not only helps to decrease the level of global warming by implementing strict law but also can aware the population to minimize this problem. To elaborate further, the uses of fossil fuels by the industries at large scale and exhaust fumes produce from huge uses of private means of transportation by the people could be halt or reduced when there will be solid law employed by the authority against overuse of these resources. For an illustration, a survey conducted recently has revealed that 40% pollution can be minimized at globally if society follows the issued law and order with responsibility. Moreover, the government can arrange awareness program at urban and rural areas to save the environment by growing more trees. As a result, soil erosion and changes in climate can be stopped for a long-term. Nevertheless, this is individual's responsibility as well to maintain earth's climate. The first and foremost contribution by human to change their habits toward lifestyle. They must travel in public transportation rather than their own vehicles. This will reduce the level of exhaust fumes which are harmful for our atmosphere. Secondly, more biodegradable products must be utilized around the world to reduce the global warming problem. Additionally, people could prefer those things which could be recycled and reused in future for a certain time period. Hence, the environmentally friendly demeanor assist to reduce the temperature of earth's surface. To recapitulate, after discussing both views, I unequivocally opine that the authorities and communities have to work simultaneously to solve this major issue. Government and inhabitant both should be responsible at different stages to dealt the global warming and get back the nature.
To
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reduce
the increased temperature due to
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human's activities
on earth
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must
be halt with the contribution of the authorities. Although, this notion is
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favoured
by
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some
part of the society, others have a counter argument that to tackle this serious issue
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people
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have to
take
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some
actions on their
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own
. This essay will discuss both aspects in the upcoming paragraphs
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before
reaching to a concrete decision with my viewpoint.

To
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begin
with, the
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government
not
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only
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helps
to decrease the level of global warming by implementing strict law
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
can aware the population to minimize this problem. To elaborate
further
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
of fossil fuels by the industries at large scale and exhaust fumes produce from huge
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
of private means of transportation by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
could be halt or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
when there will be solid law employed by the authority against overuse of these resources. For an illustration, a survey conducted recently has revealed that 40% pollution can
be minimized
at globally if society follows the issued law and order with responsibility.
Moreover
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can arrange awareness program at urban and rural areas to save the environment by growing more trees.
As a result
, soil erosion and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in climate can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
for
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a long-term
.

Nevertheless
, this is individual's responsibility
as well
to maintain earth's climate. The
first
and foremost contribution by human to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their habits toward lifestyle. They
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
travel in public transportation
rather
than their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
vehicles. This will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reduce
the level of exhaust fumes which are harmful for our atmosphere.
Secondly
, more biodegradable products
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be utilized
around the world to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reduce
the global warming problem.
Additionally
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
could prefer those things which could
be recycled
and reused in future for a certain time period.
Hence
, the
environmentally
friendly demeanor assist to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reduce
the temperature of earth's surface.

To recapitulate, after discussing both views, I
unequivocally
opine that the authorities and communities
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
work
simultaneously
to solve this major issue.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
and inhabitant both should be responsible at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
stages
Did you mean "to deal"?
to dealt
the global warming and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
back the nature.

IELTS essay Some people feel that global warming should be dealt with by governments. Others feel that it is responsibility of individuals in society to solve the problem.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
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