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many students feel that their high school education does not train them for real life. Why do you think they feel this way and what could be done to make high school education more relevant? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

many students feel that their high school education does not train them for real life. Why do you think they feel this way and what could be done to make high school education more relevant? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience OLq3
The last few years, there have been concerns about the efficiency of high school education and whether their students acquire the necessary skills for real life. In my opinion, this statement is true since most classes have not had any use in my everyday life and plenty of recent graduates have shared relevant experiences. First and foremost, the main reason why this is happening is the fact that schools do not include practical and theoretical classes with content which is not based on academic matters. Recent graduates have expressed their disappointment in public education and have listed numerous occasions, where schools have not provided them with skills that are useful in everyday life. For example, I have found that many adults lack knowledge on basic economics, their responsibilities as citizens and their rights as employees. People who are not fluent in such issues often find themselves in tricky situations and taken advantage of. In addition, physical and mental health must be addressed every week, either in the form of group meetings or mandatory visits to a psychologist’s office. I believe discussions on mental health will possibly help students overcome difficulties and anxiety, while it will reduce violent incidences and the problem of bullying. Moreover, seminars on first aid and classes on physical health will familiarize students with basic medicine, which in case of emergency are extremely valuable. Given the previously mentioned information, it is perfectly clear that schools really ought to add more beneficial hours for students, but not on academic topics. The issues presented above must be presented and discussed in class at least a couple of hours weekly. Students have the need to get information from a reliable source, like school, especially since a lot of parents do not have the time or think that school has already taken care of that. To conclude, high school education lacks a plethora of material, which many adults believe would be a great advantage for real life. So, taking the time to provide knowledge on life skills to students will improve significantly the quality of education and assist them in everyday matters.
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and whether their
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acquire the necessary
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skills
for real
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life
. In my opinion, this statement is true since most
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classes
have not had any
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use
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life
and
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plenty
of recent graduates have shared relevant experiences.

First
and foremost, the main reason why this is happening is the fact that
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schools
do not include practical and theoretical
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classes
with content which is not based on academic matters. Recent graduates have expressed their disappointment in public
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education
and have listed numerous occasions, where
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schools
have not provided them with
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skills
that are useful in everyday
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life
.
For example
, I have found that
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many
adults lack knowledge on basic economics, their responsibilities as citizens and their rights as employees.
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People
who are not fluent in such issues
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often
find themselves in tricky situations and taken advantage of.

In addition
, physical and mental health
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must
be addressed
every week, either in the form of group meetings or mandatory visits to a psychologist’s office. I believe discussions on mental health will
possibly
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help
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students
overcome difficulties and anxiety, while it will
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reduce
violent incidences and the problem of bullying.
Moreover
, seminars on
first
aid and
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classes
on physical health will familiarize
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students
with basic medicine, which in case of emergency are
extremely
valuable.

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the previously mentioned information, it is
perfectly
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clear
that
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really
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add
more beneficial hours for
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students
,
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but
not on academic topics. The issues presented above
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must
be presented
and discussed in
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class
at least a couple of hours weekly.
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have the need to
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get
information from a reliable source, like
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parents do not have the time or
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has already taken care of that.

To conclude
, high
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school
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education
lacks a plethora of material, which
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many
adults believe would be a great advantage for real
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life
.
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, taking the time to provide knowledge on
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life
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skills
to
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students
will
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improve
significantly
the quality of
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education
and assist them in everyday matters.
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IELTS essay many students feel that their high school education does not train them for real life. Why do you think they feel this way and what could be done to make high school education more relevant? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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