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Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. 7dDA
There is no doubt that an individual has to pull out all the stops to be successful in sports. although some people believe that natural talent is essential for being successful in sports while others believe that perseverance and training play a major role in it. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the arguments and argue determination and practice is superior. On the one hand, those who believe that natural ability is more enough for the splendid future in sports. this is because this kind of people mainly focused on unnecessary fame and extravagant lifestyles rather than sports. For example, somebody with their natural skills cannot cope up with the consistency in their track unless they concentrate on their abilities, strengths, etc. By the end of the day, the complete belief in natural talent leaves you in the lurch. On the other hand, my view is that people have to pull their socks up in the process of a successful sportsmen. furthermore, an athlete should be dedicated and concentrated on his goal by developing various training sessions. For example, Virat Kohli the captain of the Indian cricket team, however, the highest run-scorer in the limited over format but also recognized for his complex training sessions and dedication to the game. As a result, He turns out to be the most successful batsman in the world of cricket. In short, success can be accomplished unless there are commitment and hard work. In conclusion, although natural talent is better to start over it cannot make you the long way to gain success. In my opinion, training and dedication are two essential roles for being successful in sports.
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successful
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although
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people
believe that
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natural
talent is essential for being
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successful
in
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sports
while others believe that perseverance and training play a major role in it. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the arguments and argue determination and practice is superior.

On the one hand, those who believe that
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natural
ability is more
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enough
for the splendid future in
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sports
.
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this
is
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because
this kind of
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people
mainly
focused on unnecessary fame and extravagant lifestyles
rather
than
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sports
.
For example
, somebody with their
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natural
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skills
cannot cope up with the consistency in their
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track
unless they concentrate on their abilities, strengths, etc. By the
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end
of the day, the complete belief in
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natural
talent
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leaves
you in the lurch.

On the other hand
, my view is that
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people
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have to
pull their socks up in the process of a
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successful
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sportsmen
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furthermore
, an athlete should
be dedicated
and concentrated on his goal by developing various training

sessions.
For example
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Virat
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Kohli
the captain of the Indian cricket team,

however
, the highest run-scorer in the limited over format
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also
recognized for his complex training sessions and dedication to the game.

As a result
, He turns out to be the most
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successful
batsman in the world of cricket. In short, success can
be accomplished
unless there are commitment and
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hard
work.

In conclusion
, although
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talent is better to
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over it cannot
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make
you the long way to gain success.
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In
my opinion, training and dedication are two essential roles for being
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in
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IELTS essay Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful.

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