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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation of committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation of committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment. e6OW
Nowadays, committing crime is becoming increasingly usual. With certainty, criminals are considered to be assigned with fixed penalty, while majority favors for the verdict to be taken on a particular incident. Since, each suspicious activity has distinct characteristics. In my opinion, each illicit step deserves same wrath. To begin with, penalizing the identical for all the crimes reduces the ambition. Firstly, a culprit knows the severity of punishment under the law for each kind of unlawful activity, therefore, if the judgment is similar to that of worst one, it will vent a desire. Such as, considering a mobile snatcher, if it is in his knowledge about the castigation for this act, he would refrain from attempting it. Consequently, thieves tend to vary decisions and planning on the severity of chastisement. On the other hand, taking specific verdict for each crime under a law drives the intention. This is because a suspicious person knows the judgment of an illegal activity. Similarly, if the minute unlawful act may be lead to short retribution, a criminal will might not be much worried about. For instance, if the verdict for car bike stealing contains 3. 5 months, it might not prevent a culprit to commit same illicit because he will be able to proceed towards similar deed repeatedly after every 120 to 150 days. Hence, penalty for particular illegal action leads towards an increase in crime rate. In conclusion, identical and the worst requital for all crimes drives to reduce the rate, while that of distinguishing for specific function may not be proved effective to lead peaceful. I am convinced that the illegitimate problem can only be resolved through similar judgment.
Nowadays, committing
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crime
is becoming
increasingly
usual. With certainty, criminals
are considered
to
be assigned
with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fixed
penalty, while majority favors for the verdict to
be taken
on a particular incident.
“Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
, each suspicious activity has distinct characteristics. In my opinion, each illicit step deserves same wrath.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, penalizing the identical for all the
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crimes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
the ambition.
Firstly
, a culprit knows the severity of punishment under the law for each kind of unlawful activity,
therefore
, if the judgment is similar to that of
A determiner is probably missing here: "the worst".
worst
one, it will vent a desire. Such as, considering a mobile snatcher, if it is in his knowledge about the castigation for this act, he would refrain from attempting it.
Consequently
, thieves tend to vary decisions and planning on the severity of chastisement.

On the other hand
, taking specific verdict for each
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crime
under a law drives the intention. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
a suspicious person knows the judgment of an illegal activity.
Similarly
, if the minute unlawful act may be lead to short retribution, a criminal will might not be much worried about.
For instance
, if the verdict for car bike stealing contains 3. 5 months, it might not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
a culprit to commit same illicit
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
he will be able to proceed towards similar deed
repeatedly
after every 120 to 150 days.
Hence
, penalty for particular illegal action leads towards an increase in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
rate.

In conclusion
, identical and the worst requital for all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crimes
drives to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the rate, while that of distinguishing for specific function may not
be proved
effective to lead peaceful. I
am convinced
that the illegitimate problem can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be resolved
through similar judgment.

IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation of committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment.

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