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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment.

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment. LAy8
One of the widely arguing issues today is related to the criminal justice systems. Some people believe every type of crime should have fixed punishment whereas claim that circumstantial evidence should also be taken into account. In this essay, ways of punishing will be examined and will be given On the one hand, ruthlessness of such harsh punishments ensures safety and security in society. Perpetrator will think twice before committing crime due to the punishments like the death penalty and life imprisonment. As result, crime rate has reduced significantly over the centuries in the history of humankind. According to the publication on criminal justice, many middle countries have been consistently ranking near top regarding achieving a low- crime index due to their aggressive law which are set for crimes set for certain level of complexity. On the other hand, fixed punishment seems like unfair justice systems were a committed crime with valid excuses have to face trial. Because in many countries and communities, there can be strong factor that influence crime rats such as poverty and blackmailing. Therefore, it is imperative for judges to consider all the circumstances surrounding the accused of the case in order to deliver a fair verdict. For instance, children might be forced to steal because of poverty of low family income. Thus, each crime has its own push, which can be viewed with empathy. Finally, in my opinion, a convicted person should be given punishment only based on circumstances and severity of the crime.
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widely
arguing issues
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today
is related
to the criminal justice systems.
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Some
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people
believe every type of
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crime
should have
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fixed
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punishment
whereas claim that circumstantial evidence should
also
be taken
into account. In this essay, ways of punishing will
be examined
and will be
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given


On the one hand, ruthlessness of such harsh
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punishments
ensures safety and security in society. Perpetrator will
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think
twice
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before
committing
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crime
due to the
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punishments
like the death penalty and life imprisonment. As result,
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crime
rate has
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reduced
significantly
over the centuries in the history of humankind. According to the publication on criminal justice,
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many
middle countries have been
consistently
ranking near top regarding achieving a low-
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crime
index due to their aggressive law which
are set
for
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crimes
set for certain level of complexity.

On the other hand
,
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fixed
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punishment
seems like unfair justice systems were a committed
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crime
with valid excuses
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have to
face trial.
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Because
in
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many
countries and communities, there can be strong factor that influence
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crime
rats such as poverty and blackmailing.
Therefore
, it is imperative for judges to consider all the
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circumstances surrounding
the accused of the case in order to deliver a
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fair
verdict.
For instance
, children might
be forced
to steal
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because
of poverty of low family income.
Thus
, each
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crime
has its
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own
push, which can
be viewed
with empathy.

Finally
, in my opinion, a convicted person should be
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given
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punishment
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only
based on circumstances and severity of the
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crime
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment.

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249 words
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