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The leader or director of organization are often older people but some people say that young people can also be a leader do you agree or disagree

The leader or director of organization are often older people but some people say that young people can also be a leader pWj3
In the present era, the people age doesn't matter because they have lots of knowledge due to internet service. Indeed, the leader or directors of the organization are most probably older peoples. But, few people feel younger citizens can also be a leader. This essay will explain the aged people are more suitable for director post and the reasons are discussed in the following paragraphs. To starts with, there are plenty of things, which indicated the older peoples are reasonable for the director duty. First and foremost, the main factor which is much need for direction is experience. That comes from passing the time in a particular field. That will help to make the task convenient for others. For example, the most successful companies in the world such as the TATA group. That companies director are senior citizens. The skill of a director comes from experience. Furthermore, the leaders need to be a take decision with accuracy. That quality only has in older people because they have seen enough situation in their life so they can control the unfamiliar situation very easily. The leader of any country is older people. For example, in India, the main position of countries is Prime Minister, there are more than 10 Prime Minister came and goes they all are senior citizens. To conclude, the older people have much more experience and decision-making abilities therefore, they are the best candidate for the leader and director Who makes work smooth and rapid. Overall, the aged people are more valuable for the director post rather than the young generation.
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age doesn't matter
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they have lots of knowledge due to internet service.
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, the
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leader
or
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directors
of the organization are most
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older
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peoples
.
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, few
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people
feel younger citizens can
also
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leader
. This essay will
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explain
the aged
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people
are more suitable for
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director
post and the reasons
are discussed
in the following paragraphs.

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starts
with, there are
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plenty
of things, which indicated the
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older
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peoples
are reasonable for the
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director
duty.
First
and foremost, the main factor which is much need for direction is experience. That
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comes
from passing the time in a particular field. That will
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help
to
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make
the task convenient for others.
For example
, the most successful
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companies
in the world such as the TATA group. That
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companies
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director
are senior citizens. The
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skill
of a
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director
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comes
from experience.

Furthermore
, the
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leaders
need to be a take decision with accuracy. That quality
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only
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older
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people
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because
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seen
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enough
situation in their life
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so
they can control the unfamiliar situation
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very
easily
. The
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leader
of any country is
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older
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people
.
For example
, in India, the main position of countries is Prime Minister, there are more than 10 Prime
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Minister
came and goes they all are senior citizens.

To conclude
, the
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older
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people
have much more experience and decision-making abilities
therefore
, they are the best candidate for the
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leader
and
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director
Who
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makes
work smooth and rapid.
Overall
, the aged
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people
are more valuable for the
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director
post
rather
than the young generation.
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IELTS essay The leader or director of organization are often older people but some people say that young people can also be a leader

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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