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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment. v. 3
One of the highly controversial topics nowadays is whether the judiciary system should establish fixed sentences for all crimes, or if it should consider the circumstances and motive behind each crime. This question has been around for ages and since mindsets are rarely the same, therefore, this issue might remain unsolved. In this case, some people believe that it’s better to adopt fixed punishments for each type of crime since it’s more effective, much easier to implement and ensures equality, while others are convinced that it’s better to judge each crime as an individual based on the situation. Initially, fixed punishments have enormous advantages in achieving effectiveness and justice. Above all, a given set of rules is certainly easier to implement and leads to a more effective process if we compare it with a flexible approach to punish criminals. In other words, fixed punishments will save a lot of time and money that could otherwise be directed for use in much needed services to the community such as health and education since. This is because the judges would not need to determine what type of punishment criminals would deserve as it would have been already decided for them hence, this would definitely make court proceedings a lot quicker. In addition to that, it allows criminals to be treated fairly for their crimes for the reason that it’s important to ensure no one gets discriminated. Also, there will be no differentiation between the criminals who committed the same kind of felony. Additionally, violation rate would definitely decline. People will be more cautious in their daily activities to prevent any criminal act, because they would already be knowing their fate if they ever commit a crime. Simply put, criminals will think twice before they commit any crime, as they would realize that punishment is going to be swift and strict. One good illustration of this is the declined rate of crimes in some countries that adopt a very strict and harsh punitive system. On the other hand, a simple principle can’t cover changeable situations. There should be some considerations of what were the motives of crime and also the background of criminals. There must be a different punishment between a serial killer and someone who was forced to kill for self-defending. Applying same punishment to the woman who stole a loaf of bread from a store to feed her hungry baby and a corrupt government employee who stole millions of dollars to pile up his wealth is not at all justified though stealing was the crime in both cases. Moreover, flexible sentences are more equal, compassionate and humane and it would also facilitate the respect of the public for the authority. To recap, some people believe that fixed punishments are more able to maintain efficiency, equality between criminals much faster and easier than judging people based on the circumstances and motive of each crime. I personally believe that, fixed punishments are undoubtedly necessary to make sure the effective process of the penalty system. Nevertheless, we still have to make room for flexibilities and consider every crime as an individual.
One of the
highly
controversial topics nowadays is whether the judiciary system should establish
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fixed
sentences for all
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crimes
, or if it should consider the circumstances and motive behind each
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crime
. This question has been around for ages and since mindsets are rarely the same,
therefore
, this issue might remain unsolved.
In this case
,
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some
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people
believe that it’s better to adopt
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fixed
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punishments
for each type of
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crime
since it’s more effective, much easier to implement and ensures equality, while others
are convinced
that it’s better to judge each
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crime
as an individual based on the situation.

Initially
,
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fixed
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punishments
have enormous advantages in achieving effectiveness and justice.
Above all
, a
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given
set of
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rules
is
certainly
easier to implement and leads to a more effective process if we compare it with a flexible approach to punish
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criminals
.
In other words
,
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fixed
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punishments
will save
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a lot of
time and money that could
otherwise
be directed
for
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use
in
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much needed
services to the community such as health and education since. This is
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because
the judges would not need to determine what type of
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punishment
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criminals
would deserve as it would have been already decided for them
hence
, this would definitely
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make
court proceedings a lot quicker.
In addition
to that, it
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allows
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criminals
to
be treated
fairly
for their
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crimes
for the reason that it’s
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important
to ensure no one
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gets
discriminated.
Also
, there will be no differentiation between the
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criminals
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who
committed the same kind of felony.

Additionally
, violation rate would definitely decline.
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People
will be more cautious in their daily activities to
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prevent
any
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criminal
act,
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because
they would already
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be knowing
their fate if they ever commit a
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crime
.
Simply
put,
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criminals
will
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think
twice
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before
they commit any
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crime
, as they would realize that
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punishment
is going to be swift and strict. One
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good
illustration of this is the declined rate of
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crimes
in
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some
countries that adopt a
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very
strict and harsh punitive system.

On the other hand
, a simple principle can’t cover changeable situations. There should be
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some
considerations of what were the motives of
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crime
and
also
the background of
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criminals
. There
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must
be a
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different
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punishment
between a serial killer and someone
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who
was forced
to kill for self-defending. Applying same
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punishment
to the woman
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who
stole a loaf of bread from a store to feed her hungry baby and a corrupt
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government
employee
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who
stole millions of dollars to pile up his wealth is not at all justified though stealing was the
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crime
in both cases.
Moreover
, flexible sentences are more equal, compassionate and humane and it would
also
facilitate the respect of the public for the authority.

To recap,
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some
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people
believe that
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fixed
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punishments
are more able to maintain efficiency, equality between
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criminals
much faster and easier than judging
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people
based on the circumstances and motive of each
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crime
. I
personally
believe that,
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fixed
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punishments
are
undoubtedly
necessary to
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make
sure the effective process of the penalty system.
Nevertheless
, we
still
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have to
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make
room for
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flexibilities
and consider every
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crime
as an individual.
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43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment. v. 3

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