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Some people believe that their travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses of the worlds fuel resources.

Some people believe that their travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses of the worlds fuel resources. ogb3
Revolution in air travel has seen in 21st century. It is claimed by some people that the usage of fossil fuels and air pollution is increasing due to increase of air services. It should be limited. I partially agree with this statement. To commence with, certain reasons are there why air travel sources should be restricted. First and foremost, the fossil fuel are neither environment friendly nor renewable. Theirfore, air travel services requires huge amount of fuel and also it omits large proportion of pollution in terms of smoke, which may fall negative effect on human being as well as animals. Consequently, it may give birth to you diseases such as cancer and infection and may effect their blood circulation. Secondly, the fossil fuels are not long lasting, if usage of these fuels are increasing at significantly proportion, people have to face lot of difficulties in the future and it might be extinct. On the contrary, there are two major reasons of why restrictions are not imposed on air travel services because in current days the import and export goods are transported with the help of air services. If these travel services are restricted, it will not only effect on transportation system but also would lead to national income of all countries. Second and prominently, as travelling is one of the fabulous mode of getting incomes for some Nations because they mostly prefer to air services, whenever they are making plan for visiting beautiful spots in other countries. To conclude, all the pollution and fossil fuel consumption is increasing by place out these services have a prominent role in country's development by different ways. That is why I give priority not to restrict these air travels.
Revolution in
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has
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in 21st century. It
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some
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people
that the usage of
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fossil
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fuels
and
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air
pollution is increasing due to increase of
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air
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services
. It should
be limited
. I
partially
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agree
with this statement.

To commence with, certain reasons are there why
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air
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travel
sources should
be restricted
.
First
and foremost, the
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fossil
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fuel
are neither environment friendly nor renewable.
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Theirfore
,
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air
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travel
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services
requires huge amount of
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fuel
and
also
it omits large proportion of pollution in terms of smoke, which may fall
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negative
effect on human being
as well
as animals.
Consequently
, it may give birth to
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you diseases
such as cancer and infection and may
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effect
their blood circulation.
Secondly
, the
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fossil
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fuels
are not
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long lasting
, if usage of these
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fuels
are increasing at
significantly
proportion,
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people
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have to
face
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lot of
difficulties in the future and it might be extinct.

On the contrary
, there are two major reasons of why restrictions are not imposed on
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air
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travel
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services
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because
in
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current
days the import and export
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goods
are transported
with the
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help
of
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air
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services
. If these
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travel
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services
are restricted
, it will not
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only
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effect
on transportation system
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but
also
would lead to national income of all countries. Second and
prominently
, as travelling is one of the fabulous mode of getting incomes for
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some
Nations
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because
they
mostly
prefer to
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air
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services
, whenever they are making plan for visiting
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beautiful
spots in other countries.

To conclude
, all the pollution and
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fossil
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fuel
consumption is increasing by place out these
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services
have a prominent role in country's development by
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different
ways.
That is
why I give priority not to restrict these
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air
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travels
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that their travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses of the worlds fuel resources.

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4 paragraphs
286 words
6.0
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