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An increasing number of people can live up to 100 years old. What do you think the reasons are? Does it have some effects on individuals and society?

An increasing number of people can live up to 100 years old. What do you think the reasons are? Does it have some effects on individuals and society? g58l3
In recent years, there is a trend that people’s expectancy has been prolonged and some of them even can live up to 100 years old. There are a variety of reasons that account for this situation, while some of the factors will be discussed below, followed by potential effects on individuals and society. There are two common explanations that contribute to this situation. To begin with, the improvement of medical treatment and health insurance makes longer lifespan become possible for the mankind. Compared with the situation in the past when medical technology was still in low level, the maj. . .
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IELTS essay An increasing number of people can live up to 100 years old. What do you think the reasons are? Does it have some effects on individuals and society?

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