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Some people believe that the problem of illigal drugs can be solved by legalising all drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some people believe that the problem of illigal drugs can be solved by legalising all drugs. 81EG
In this contemporary era, supply of illegal drugs has been increased in the whole world which is the sign of negative develpoment for every nation, so, to limit this people hold the opinion to legalise all the available drugs everywhere. I also in favor of the said opinion as this can have a positive effect in suspecting illigal drugs. To begin with, by makeing drugs in legal process can create the fear in the mind of the people not to indulge in this illigal activity as they will not manufacture the drugs which are prohibited in the society. Moreever, by putting the all drugs under legal process can impact on the spreading of these illigal drugs in the society which i believe is the main cause of degradation og youth nowadays. In addition, if the government will not take strict steps against this activity, it will be hard for higher authorities to control the illigal supply of the drugs in nation which is impactiong the progress of the world as youth have ease to get these iiligal drugs in the society. Also legalising the drugs can reduce the hidden profit of the drugs companies. Because many people are involve in this business due to the benefits of shortcut earning. To conclude, I believe that there should be a process of making all drugs legalised which not only helpful to save youth fr
In this contemporary era, supply of illegal
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drugs
has
been increased
in the whole world which is the
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sign
of
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negative
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develpoment
for every nation,
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so
, to limit this
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people
hold the opinion to
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legalise
all the available
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drugs
everywhere.

I
also
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positive
effect in suspecting
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illigal
drugs.

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makeing
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drugs
in legal process can create the fear in the mind of the
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people
not to indulge in this
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illigal
activity as they will not manufacture the
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drugs
which
are prohibited
in the society.

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Moreever
, by putting the all
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drugs
under legal process can impact on the spreading of these
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illigal
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drugs
in the society which
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i
believe is the main cause of degradation
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og
youth nowadays.

In addition
, if the
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government
will not take strict steps against this activity, it will be
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hard
for higher authorities to control the
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illigal
supply of the
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drugs
in nation which is
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impactiong
the progress of the world as youth have
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ease
to
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get
these
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iiligal
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drugs
in the society.
Also
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legalising
the
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drugs
can
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reduce
the hidden profit of the
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drugs
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companies
.
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many
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people
are involve in this business due to the benefits of shortcut earning.

To conclude
, I believe that there should be a process of making all
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drugs
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legalised
which not
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only
helpful to save youth
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the problem of illigal drugs can be solved by legalising all drugs.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
231 words
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