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Some people believe that the government should make university education free for all. Others disagree and say students should pay for their own education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people believe that the government should make university education free for all. Others disagree and say students should pay for their own education. v. 1
The idea of free tertiary education fully funded by government causes debates in the society. For some people this is the best strategy, while others claim that students should be responsible for their expenses for study. Both opinions have grounds and they need to be closely examined. On the one hand, the proponents of free access to higher education support their view with some important reasons. Among them is the fact that free education would positively affect the general educational level in a country, which in its turn would expand highly qualified workforce and, as a result, would have improved the economy at large. It is also important to keep in mind that free higher education would provide equal rights to all categories of students, including those who cannot afford to study at a university level. By contrast, there are people who believe that students should cover their higher education, not government. This can be exemplified by the fact that access to this type of education should be competitive and selective in order to the elevate the status of higher education and prepare a cohort of highly professional specialists. On another note, besides supporting higher education, government has to subsidize many other spheres of public life. Therefore, only school education should be free for all citizens, whereas tertiary studies should be open only for those who can meet the expenses. To conclude, in my view, there should be a balance in allocating public funding for university education, and governments should provide a certain percentage of merit-based and need-based financial aid to make higher education more accessible. This policy is especially true for those countries which cannot afford entirely free education systems, and this is why avoiding paying higher education is hardly possible in such countries.
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causes debates in the society. For
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this is the best strategy, while others claim that students should be responsible for their expenses for study. Both opinions have
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grounds and
they need to be
closely
examined.

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access to higher
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support their view with
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reasons. Among them is the fact that
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would
positively
affect the general educational level in a country, which in its turn would expand
highly
qualified workforce and,
as a result
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improved
the economy at large. It is
also
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important
to
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in mind that
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higher
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would provide equal rights to all categories of students, including those who cannot afford to study at a university level.

By contrast, there are
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who believe that students should cover their higher
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, not
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. This can
be exemplified
by the fact that access to this type of
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should be competitive and selective in order to
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the status of higher
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and prepare a cohort of
highly
professional specialists. On another note,
besides
supporting higher
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education
,
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government
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has to
subsidize
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many
other spheres of public life.
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,
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school
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should be
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for all citizens, whereas tertiary studies should be open
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only
for those who can
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meet
the expenses.

To conclude
, in my view, there should be a balance in allocating public funding for university
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education
, and
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governments
should provide a certain percentage of merit-based and need-based financial aid to
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make
higher
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education
more accessible. This policy is
especially
true for those countries which cannot afford
entirely
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free
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education
systems, and this is why avoiding paying higher
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education
is hardly possible in such countries.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the government should make university education free for all. Others disagree and say students should pay for their own education. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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