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Some people believe that the government should help the unemployed ona weekly basis. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.

Some people believe that the government should help the unemployed ona weekly basis. Give your own opinion. pdLa
Unemployment is becoming a major problem all over the world. Even in some developed nations, the rate of unemployment is high. This is sometimes attributed to the financial recession that gripped the world during the first decade of this century. While the situation improved considerably over the last few years, a lot of people who had been laid off by their previous employers are still out of work. Some people feel that the government should give them weekly financial allowances. I don’t think that this is a viable solution. To start with, if governments were to provide financial assistance to every unemployed person, they would have little money to run the country. Most nations already have several welfare schemes for the jobless and the governments certainly offer some financial assistance through these schemes. Of course, these nominal financial aids are unlikely to solve the financial woes of the jobless. I won’t blame the governments for these because there is a limit to the amount of money they can spend. In most cases unemployment is the result of the lack of skills. People who possess skills that the industry demands will have no difficulty finding jobs. Yes, the recession wiped away many jobs. However, there are still several sectors that need skilled manpower. Instead of doling out financial assistance to jobless people, the government should run free training programs and camps where the jobless can pick up skills. This will provide a lasting solution to this problem. The government should also create awareness about the dignity of labour. The unemployment rates in India are high. This is not really caused by the dearth of job. Rather it is a result of misplaced notions of dignity. The educated middle class Indians will only accept white collar jobs. If the jobless take up manual jobs, the nation will become much more prosperous. To conclude, giving weekly financial assistance to the jobless will not increase the GDP of a nation. It is never a solution. Instead of giving people money, the government should provide free training that will increase their employability.
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developed
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, the rate of
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unemployment
is high. This is
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financial
recession that gripped the world during the
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over the last few years,
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still
out of work.
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feel that the
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allowances. I don’t
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that this is a viable solution.

To
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with, if
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governments
were to provide
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assistance
to every unemployed person, they would have
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little
money to run the country. Most
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nations
already have several welfare schemes for the jobless and the
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governments
certainly
offer
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financial
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assistance
through these schemes.
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, these nominal
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aids are unlikely to solve the
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financial
woes of the jobless. I won’t blame the
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governments
for these
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there is a limit to the amount of money they can spend.

In most cases
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unemployment
is the result of the lack of
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skills
.
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People
who possess
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skills
that the industry demands will have no difficulty finding
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jobs
. Yes, the recession wiped away
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many
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jobs
.
However
, there are
still
several sectors that need skilled manpower.
Instead
of doling out
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financial
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assistance
to jobless
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people
, the
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government
should run free training programs and camps where the jobless can pick up
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skills
. This will provide a lasting solution to this problem.

The
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government
should
also
create awareness about the dignity of
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labour
. The
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unemployment
rates in India are high. This is not
really
caused by the dearth of
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job
.
Rather
it is a result of misplaced notions of dignity. The educated middle
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class
Indians will
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only
accept white collar
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jobs
. If the jobless take up manual
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jobs
, the
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nation
will become much more prosperous.

To conclude
, giving weekly
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financial
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assistance
to the jobless will not increase the GDP of a
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nation
. It is never a solution.
Instead
of giving
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people
money, the
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government
should provide free training that will increase their employability.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the government should help the unemployed ona weekly basis. Give your own opinion.

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