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Buying new things has too much importance these days. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Buying new things has too much importance these days. jpdp

In the modern world status of a person is judged by the car he drives, the branded clothes he wears, state of the art phone he owns, the posh place he stays in and so on. It has become an endless battle which never going to stop, because there is no end to it. I wholeheartedly agree with this statement. People are becoming so much materialistic these days. In order to show social status, humans start getting into debt as they purchase expensive items. Also it has become very common, especially among teenagers to show how wealthy they are, because they can afford to buy luxurious iPhone or other brand new devices. Having said that, people forget to look at better values of life, it has been always said: “don’t judge book by its cover” and I strongly agree with it, because for becoming a reliable as well as good person, it is crucial to have kind soul and be intelligent. In addition, those people who look forward to buying new products are usually miss out on more necessary activities such as reading, exercising or hanging out with friends. On the other hand, for earlier generations, buying food or go shopping involved visiting several shops, each with the same limited range on offer. Customers had less money and credit was not widely available. By contrast, shoppers nowadays can find almost anything in the supermarket or shopping mall. The comfortable environment, the variety of goods and attractions such as cafeterias and cinemas make spending money enjoyable. In conclusion, despite some of the perceived benefits, I believe that it has become a widespread habit to spend a number of money on unnecessary items, rather than making life brighter by getting together with friends or traveling

In the modern world status of a person is judged
 by the car he drives, the branded clothes he wears, Did you mean "state-of-the-art"?state-of-the-art
state of the art
 phone he This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possesses
owns
, the posh place he stays in and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 on. It has become an endless battle which never going to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :terminateceasediscontinue
stop
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 there is no This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 to it. I wholeheartedly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 with this statement.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
People
 are becoming This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 much materialistic these days. In order to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 social status, humans This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 getting into debt as they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
 expensive items. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Also,
Also
 it has become This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 common, especially
 among This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenilesadolescents
teenagers
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 how wealthy they are, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 they can afford to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
 luxurious iPhone or other 'brand new' seems to be a compound adjective in front of a noun. Use a hyphen: "brand-new".brand-new
brand new
 devices. Having said that, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 forget to look at better values of life, it The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.has always been
has been always
 said: “don’t judge book by its cover” and I strongly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 with it, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 for becoming a reliable as well
 as This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 person, it is crucial to have kind soul and be intelligent. In addition
, those This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 who look forward to buying new products are usually
Consider using a past participle here: "missed".missed
miss
 out on more necessary activities such as reading, exercising or hanging out with friends.

On the other hand
, for earlier generations, buying food or go shopping involved visiting several shops, each with the same limited range on offer. Customers had less money and credit was not widely
 available. By contrast, shoppers nowadays can find almost anything in the supermarket or shopping mall. The comfortable environment, the variety of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :productscommoditiesmerchandises
goods
 and attractions such as cafeterias and cinemas This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 spending money enjoyable.

In conclusion
, despite If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?some
some of the
 perceived benefits, I believe that it has become a widespread habit to spend Possible agreement error. The noun money seems to be uncountable; consider using: "much money", "a good deal of money".much moneya good deal of money
a number of money
 on unnecessary items, rather
 than making life brighter by getting together with friends or traveling