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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most of the persons think that teens should be helps society in different work in their free time. That can also beneficial for juvenile and the society. Well I not agree with this statement because why we pressure youth to do unpaid work. On the contrary, the teens wants to do jobs which helps them financially.  Firstly, the youth have other pressure like study and making money for their family and also for their studies. For example, a student who’s study in collage have lot of homework to do and when they done their work they need to do some activities which gave them money and also relaxation.  On the contrary, if the the teens don’t do jobs in their free time and they play video games and also in dangerous habits like drug consuming. So, in this case they have to do some of unpaid community work to busy their self in different type of peoples which helps them in different life situation.  In conclusion, people don’t force them to do society works and helps them to focus in their studies and do different jobs to help their family financially.

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