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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. MXl9
Teenagers are always considered as a backbone of their nation. Involving them in a work related to their society always provide an opportunity to learn. Some people in the society opine that this kind of job should be done by the teenagers without any pay. I completely disagree with the aforementioned statement and will discuss this in subsequent paragraphs. To begin with, the major drawback of involving teenagers in free work will always lead to extra burden without any outcome. Most of the people usually entail in a job by having a thinking to get some fruitful award. Similarly, teenagers could also have the similar sentiments as others. Without any pay, they will not feel motivated enough to take participation in the community work. Secondly, there are many people who easily take an undue advantage of unpaid job by the youth. For instance, In India many students were forced to devotee extra hours while they were volunteering during COVID pandemic. Consequently, this makes hardship for youngsters to do work without any pay. Moreover, in this contemporary era, where everyone has their other commitments due to their hectic schedule, it is not possible to give a lot of your time and effort to an unpaid work. Most of the schools have burdensome curriculum for youngsters which require a heaps of time to get finish before due dates. To exemplify, university going youth have multiple subjects those include various assessments and projects to finish on their due dates. If youngsters will do unpaid work then it would result in wastage of their time and attempt. In conclusion, it is crucial to provide some money after doing any kind of work by youngster due to the fact of creating motivation and dedication in them to come forward and serve their community. Otherwise, it could only lead to their misuse of their time and their intentions.
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Teenagers
are always considered as a backbone of their nation. Involving them in a
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work
related to their society always provide an opportunity to learn.
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Some
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people
in the society opine that this kind of job should
be done
by the
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teenagers
without any pay. I completely disagree with the aforementioned statement and will discuss this in subsequent paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, the major drawback of involving
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teenagers
in free
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work
will always lead to extra burden without any outcome. Most of the
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people
usually
entail in a job by having a thinking to
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get
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some
fruitful award.
Similarly
,
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teenagers
could
also
have the similar sentiments as others. Without any pay, they will not feel motivated
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enough
to take participation in the community
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work
.
Secondly
, there are
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many
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people
who
easily
take an undue advantage of unpaid job by the youth.
For instance
, In India
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many
students
were forced
to devotee extra hours while they were volunteering during
Did you mean "COVID-19" or the alternative spelling "Covid-19" (= coronavirus)?
COVID
pandemic.
Consequently
, this
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makes
hardship for youngsters to do
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work
without any pay.

Moreover
, in this contemporary era, where everyone has their other commitments
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due
to their hectic schedule, it is not possible to give
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a lot of
your
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time
and effort to an unpaid
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work
. Most of the schools have burdensome curriculum for youngsters which require
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a heaps
of
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time
to
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get
finish
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before
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due
dates. To exemplify, university going youth have multiple subjects those include various assessments and projects to finish on their
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due
dates. If youngsters
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will do
unpaid
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work
then it would result in wastage of their
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time
and attempt.

In conclusion
, it is crucial to provide
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some
money after doing any kind of
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work
by
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youngster
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due
to the fact of creating motivation and dedication in them to
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come
forward and serve their community.
Otherwise
, it could
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only
lead to their misuse of their
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time
and their intentions.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.0
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