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Some people believe that teenager should be required to do unpaid work in their free time. These can benefit teenager and society as too . To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some people believe that teenager should be required to do unpaid work in their free time. These can benefit teenager and society as too. NM0B0
Voluntary work should be done by teenager during their leisure time as it gave enormous benefits to them and society I believe it provide them work experience and some basic skills like team work and community will get aid for improving their contacts, basic facilities Doing work without salary is best way to gain experience of work as well as for learning about team work. As pupils have dream to do a white colour jobs, it is come true only when they meet the basic requirements namely knowledge of work and academic certificates. Therefore they have only one way to get experience, it is just by doing unpaid work. Moreover, while working with other they learn about how to behave with thier peers and about doing working in a team. Ultimately these kind of knowledge help teenager in thier latter life Community also get lot of advantages form volunteer work. It can aid one society to build strong bonds with thier neighborhood. In brief, when one nation know that thier near ones are suffering from something on that time they can assist them by giving volunteer. For example, in recent years USA provide a voluntary tutor to Pakistan for improving thier literacy rate, due to that relation of Pakistan is become more strong with America. Furthermore government get a work done from teenager without any  expenditure, which will help the nation to improve thier infrastructure and providing basic amenities to people. Hence, it will increase the facility and bonds of community To sum up, if youth do a unpaid work in thier free time then it will not only gave them benefits but also nation get many advantages
Voluntary
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teenager
during their leisure time as it gave enormous benefits to them and society I believe it provide them
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work
experience and
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some
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basic
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skills
like team
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work
and community will
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get
aid for improving their contacts,
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basic
facilities

Doing
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work
without salary
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is best
way to gain experience of
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work
as well
as for learning about team
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work
. As pupils have dream to do a white
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colour
jobs, it is
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come
true
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only
when they
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meet
the
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basic
requirements
namely
knowledge of
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work
and academic certificates.
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Therefore
they have
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only
one way to
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get
experience, it is
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just
by doing unpaid
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work
.
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, while working with other they learn about how to behave with
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thier
peers and about
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doing working
in a team.
Ultimately
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these kind
of knowledge
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help
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teenager
in
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thier
latter life

Community
also
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get
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lot of
advantages form volunteer
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work
. It can aid one society to build strong bonds with
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thier
neighborhood.
In brief
, when one nation know that
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thier
near ones are suffering from something on that time they can assist them by giving volunteer.
For example
, in recent years USA
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provide
a voluntary tutor to Pakistan for improving
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thier
literacy rate, due to that relation of Pakistan
is become
more strong with America.
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Furthermore
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government
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get
a
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work
done from
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teenager
without
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any&nbsp
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help
the nation to
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improve
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thier
infrastructure and providing
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basic
amenities to
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people
.
Hence
, it will increase the facility and bonds of community

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a
unpaid
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work
in
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thier
free time then it will not
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only
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gave
them benefits
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also
nation
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get
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many
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IELTS essay Some people believe that teenager should be required to do unpaid work in their free time. These can benefit teenager and society as too.

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