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Some people believe that technology has made man more social. ‎ To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?‎

Some people believe that technology has made man more social. ‎ with this opinion? ‎ e0XO
What do you think about technology’s effects? It is Saied that thanks to advanced technology people can ‎have better social lives, and It seems to me that, it can positively affect our lives. ‎ Nowadays, there are different types of technology which have been using every day. The most significant ‎one that can catch people’s attention for agreeing with this myth could be communication tools, which ‎have been made in recent years, such as social media, that can enable individuals to keep their connection ‎with their families, who are faraway by video calls or things like this. Besides that, it helps them to form ‎new relationships via some applications like Facebook and Instagram, especially on current occasions, ‎which everyone is suffering from the complexity that COVID-19 created and its limitation, which is known ‎as quarantine. So, it can result in people feeling less isolated from society. ‎ In other words, technology has enhanced human’s socialization even in the past when there aren’t nether ‎internet nor social networks by developing simple transportation tools take wheels as an example, when ‎communities have a small population and people were living in with vast majority distances in their ‎farmlands, they couldn’t see each other even their neighbors due to lack of proper transport which they ‎could utilize. Hence, when the wheel has been invented as transport technology, it gives humans this ‎opportunity to have face-to-face interaction with each other, which means that it creates noticeable ‎improvement in our ancestor’s social skills. ‎ In conclusion, various kinds of technology have always helped people throughout history in terms of social ‎lives by sophisticated tools like social media or even the simplest ones as wheels. We will see perfect ‎technology in the future. ‎
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technology
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can ‎have better
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Nowadays, there are
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different
types of
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technology
which have been using every day. The most significant ‎one that can catch
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people’s
attention for agreeing with this myth could be communication tools, which ‎have
been made
in recent years, such as
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social
media, that can enable individuals to
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keep
their connection ‎with their families, who are faraway by video calls or things like this.
Besides
that, it
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helps
them to form ‎new relationships via
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some
applications like Facebook and Instagram,
especially
on
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current
occasions, ‎which everyone is suffering from the complexity that COVID-19 created and its limitation, which
is known
‎as quarantine.
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So
, it can result in
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people
feeling less isolated from society. ‎

In other words
,
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technology
has enhanced human’s socialization even in the past when there aren’t nether ‎internet nor
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social
networks by developing simple transportation tools take wheels as an example, when ‎communities have a
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small
population and
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people
were living in with vast majority distances in their ‎farmlands, they couldn’t
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see
each other even their neighbors due to lack of proper transport which they ‎could utilize.
Hence
, when the wheel has
been invented
as transport
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technology
, it gives humans this ‎opportunity to have face-to-face interaction with each other, which means that it creates noticeable ‎improvement in our ancestor’s
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social
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skills
. ‎

In conclusion
, various kinds of
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technology
have always
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helped
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people
throughout history in terms of
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social
‎
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lives
by sophisticated tools like
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social
media or even the simplest ones as wheels. We will
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see
perfect
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‎technology
in the future. ‎
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IELTS essay Some people believe that technology has made man more social. ‎ with this opinion? ‎

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4 paragraphs
286 words
6.5
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