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Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated whether the advent of sophisticated modern technology such as mobile phones, laptops and iPad have helped to enhance and improve people’s social lives or whether the opposite has become the case. Personally, I strongly advocate the former view. This essay will discuss both sides using examples from the UK government and Oxford University to demonstrate points and prove arguments. On the one hand there is ample, powerful, almost daily evidence that such technology can be detrimental especially to the younger generation who are more easily affected by it’s addictive nature and which can result in people feeling more isolated from the society. The central reason behind this is twofold, firstly, the invention of online social media sites and apps, such as Twitter and Facebook have reduced crucial face-to-face interactions dramatically.  Through use of these appealing and attractive mediums, people feel in touch and con
Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated whether the advent of sophisticated modern technology such as mobile phones, laptops and iPad have
helped
to enhance and
improve
people
’s social
lives
 or whether the opposite has become the case.
Personally
, I
strongly
advocate the former view. This essay will discuss both sides using examples from the UK
government
and Oxford University to demonstrate points and prove arguments.

On the one hand there is ample, powerful, almost daily evidence that such technology can be detrimental 
especially
to the younger generation who are more
easily
affected
by
it’s
 addictive nature and which can result in
people
 feeling more isolated from the society. The central reason behind this is twofold,
firstly
, the invention of online social media sites and apps, such as Twitter and Facebook have 
reduced
 crucial face-to-face interactions 
dramatically
.  Through
use
of these appealing and attractive mediums,
people
feel in touch and
con
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IELTS essay Some people believe that technology has made man more social. with this opinion?

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  American English
2 paragraphs
138 words
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