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Some people believe that spending alot of money on marriage is waste of resources.

Some people believe that spending alot of money on marriage is waste of resources. nEXNR
Now a days, people are spending there lot of wealth on marriage. Many people are totally against this action. I totally agree with this notation. Not only because it can lead to financial problems and stress but also damages their children's education. This essay will explore how saving money for future use and not spending on lavish weddings would be helpful. There are many drawbacks of throwing lavish wedding ceremony's. Firstly, alot of people mostly from middle class are not that financial ly stable so they take loans in order to throw these amazing lavish ceremonies which leads them to financial problems. As, mostly in Asian countries it is very common to see that many couples taking loan for ceremony. For example, in India more then 70% middle class couples take loans to just show their wealth. Thus, big marriage ceremonies are very dangerous for married couples. Secondly, they can use this money on there children future education. As, when they do not have enough money it will disturb their children's education. So you should be contious about that. For instance, a news was published in a local Newspaper that many students face financial problem due to their parents because they do not think about that. Hence, it will lead the child to bad future. Finally, when you take loan it gives you brain problems like stress. However, depression is also main cause of this. As, many marriages broke due to this issue. To sum-up, spending lot of your wealth in weddings can lead you to a point where you are totally broke. This will give you stress and moreover, it also damages childs education as well. So saving money for future will give you nice and happy relation.
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education
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and not spending on lavish weddings would be helpful.

There are
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drawbacks of throwing lavish wedding ceremony's.
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they take
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loans
in order to throw these amazing lavish ceremonies which leads them to
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financial
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problems
. As,
mostly
in Asian countries it is
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couples taking
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show
their wealth.
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marriage ceremonies are
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for married couples.

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, they can
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use
this
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money
on
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children future
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education
. As, when they do not have
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enough
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money
it will disturb their children's
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education
.
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you should be
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the child to
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future.

Finally
, when you take
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it gives you brain
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As
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marriages broke due to this issue.

To sum-up, spending
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lot of
your wealth in weddings can
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lead
you to a point where you are
totally
broke. This will give you
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stress
and
moreover
, it
also
damages
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education
as well
.
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saving
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money
for future will give you nice and happy relation.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that spending alot of money on marriage is waste of resources.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
289 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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