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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. mQXr
People often share a lot of information either in life or work. In some fields, such as academic world or business, information sharing is sometimes important, but my point is that the sharing of some precious information should be restricted. The main function of information sharing is to save much time and to improve work efficiency. If you can gain other’ s successful experience form information sharing. It will undoubtedly save your cost of trial and error. For example, in business, Huawei has been saved much time and energy to focus 5G technology, because it shared as much as information as possible with Apple in the past 4G era. In addition, information sharing also inspire people a lot of ideas. Opponents, however, argue that information sharing can limit the development of some industries, if some valuable information are not restricted to share. The free sharing will cause producer of information to face losses. For instance, the writing time of a graduation thesis maybe as long as five years. If the core information in this article are shared without restriction, the value of this paper will be reduced once it’s published. Therefore, I think that the sharing of some precious information should be restricted, as it will fundamentally affect the development of productivity. With the progress of the times, professional information consulting will face industrialization, and information companies will also face fierce competition. The government should introduce relevant policies to restrict information sharing, thereby stimulating economic development.
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information
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sharing
is to save much
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time
and to
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improve
work efficiency.
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If
you can gain other’ s successful experience form
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information
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sharing
. It will
undoubtedly
save your cost of trial and error.
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, in business, Huawei has
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much
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time
and energy to focus 5G technology,
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it shared as much as
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information
as possible with Apple in the past 4G era.
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, argue that
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sharing
can limit the development of
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some
industries, if
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some
valuable
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information
are not restricted to share. The free
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sharing
will cause producer of
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information
to face losses.
For instance
, the writing
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time
of a graduation thesis maybe as long as five years. If the core
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information
in this article
are shared
without restriction, the value of this paper will be
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reduced
once it’s published.

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, I
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think
that the
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sharing
of
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some
precious
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information
should
be restricted
, as it will
fundamentally
affect the development of productivity. With the progress of the
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times
, professional
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information
consulting will face industrialization, and
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information
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companies
will
also
face fierce competition. The
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government
should introduce relevant policies to restrict
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information
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sharing
, thereby stimulating economic development.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
246 words
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