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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. aj9Y
in the modern globalisation people tends to believe that such kind of marvelous information related to scientific research business and academic world while other people believe that some information is too important or too valuable to share freely. First and foremost reason, that people believes nowadays it is mandatory to share some amount of required knowledge about scientific research where the people know that in our modern world, what kind of research must be organised and in which field as well as program the get to be success. For example recently research about the Falcon 9 rocket where the elone mask can success to reuse the rocket and achieved to land rocket vertically. Secondly, some people should wants to share the knowledge about the trade market and business fail related issue and marketing because it is mandatory to know each and every people. For instance to share knowledge about reading the stakeholder to make profit in trade market. On the other side, where some people believe that it is most important as well as more valuable to share the information related to politics and current affairs comma because it is mandatory to share some kind of appropriate knowledge to select the leader who gave the community property resources and manage some criteria. For example to develop some infrastructure over the countryside to raise economy. As per my perspective, that each and every people must share the information which is valuable to most people to take some prophet and knowledge in their entire life, where the media is helping other. On the basis of the points mentioned above, I concludethat it is mandatory to share such important research to gain their knowledge as well as valuable resources.
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the modern
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globalisation
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people
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tends
to
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believe
that such kind of marvelous
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information
related to scientific
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research
business and academic world while other
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people
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believe
that
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some
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information
is too
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important
or too
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valuable
to
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share
freely
.

First
and foremost reason, that
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people
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believes
nowadays it is
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mandatory
to
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share
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some
amount of required
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knowledge
about scientific
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research
where the
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people
know that in our modern world, what kind of
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research
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must
be
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organised
and in which field
as well
as program the
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get
to be success.
For example
recently
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research
about the Falcon 9 rocket where the
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elone
mask can success to reuse the rocket and achieved to land rocket
vertically
.
Secondly
,
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some
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people
should
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to
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share
the
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knowledge
about the trade market and business fail related issue and marketing
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because
it is
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mandatory
to know each and every
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people
.
For instance
to
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share
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knowledge
about reading the stakeholder to
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make
profit in trade market.

On the other side, where
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some
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people
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believe
that it is most
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important
as well
as more
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valuable
to
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share
the
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information
related to politics and
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current
affairs comma
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because
it is
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mandatory
to
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share
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some
kind of appropriate
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knowledge
to select the leader who gave the community property resources and manage
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some
criteria.
For example
to develop
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some
infrastructure over the countryside to raise economy.

As per my perspective, that each and every
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people
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must
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share
the
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information
which is
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valuable
to most
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people
to take
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some
prophet and
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knowledge
in their entire life, where the media
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is
helping other.

On the basis of the points mentioned above, I
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concludethat
it is
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mandatory
to
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share
such
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important
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research
to gain their
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knowledge
as well
as
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valuable
resources.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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