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As countries have developed, there has been a trend towards smaller family size, why does this happen? How does this affect the society?

As countries have developed, there has been a trend towards smaller family size, why does this happen? How does this affect the society? rlon
It is a fact that in modern world, several people follow the trend of nuclear family, for their sale. There are several reasons for such a situation and also few visible influences too. Both the aspects are explained in the ensuring paragraph. To initiate with, the most common one is that, people get their privacy and no restrictions imposed on them. Moreover, this is because, in joint family there are rules and regulations created by the elder and that needs to be followed by every family member, because of which, one can't enjoy their life to the fullest. However, the other cause is, large family needs huge maintenance, and nowaday's people don't like to spend money on that, instead they outlay on travelling, food and education. Furthermore, this leads them to have smaller family. The mentioned causes have some impact too. The foremost effect is seen on the oldest member of the family, they are oftenly left alone at their house, or they admitted to the old age home, when none of their relatives are present, which leads to build more assisted living facility in the society. The other repercussion is, children's are left unattended during the working hours of their parents, they lack the shelter of their grandparents and sometimes they can even get depressed because of loneliness. Moreover due to such effects society is affected the most. To recapitulate, it can be finally commented that nuclear families have negative impact even on the society although on children probably on the aged people
It is a fact that in modern world, several
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follow the trend of nuclear
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family
, for their sale. There are several reasons for such a situation and
also
few visible influences too. Both the aspects are
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explained
in the ensuring paragraph.

To initiate with, the most common one is that,
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people
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get
their privacy and no restrictions imposed on them.
Moreover
, this is
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because
, in joint
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family
there are
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rules
and regulations created by the elder and that needs to
be followed
by every
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family
member,
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because
of which, one can't enjoy their life to the fullest.
However
, the other cause is, large
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family
needs huge maintenance, and
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nowaday
's
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people
don't like to spend money on that,
instead
they outlay on travelling, food and education.
Furthermore
, this leads them to have smaller family.

The mentioned causes have
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some
impact too. The foremost effect is
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seen
on the oldest member of the
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family
, they are
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oftenly
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left
alone at their
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house
, or they admitted to the
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old
age home, when none of their relatives are present, which leads to build more assisted living facility in the society.
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The
other repercussion is, children's are
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left
unattended during the working hours of their parents, they lack the shelter of their grandparents and
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sometimes
they can even
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get
depressed
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because
of loneliness.
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Moreover
due to such effects society is
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affected
the most.

To recapitulate, it can be
finally
commented that nuclear
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families
have
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negative
impact even on the society although on children
probably
on the aged
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people

IELTS essay As countries have developed, there has been a trend towards smaller family size, why does this happen? How does this affect the society?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
5.0
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