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some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. 8K8r
Firstly, it is vital for people to be able to access platforms to share information so it will create a network and information flow between the researches. This is provided by the citations of academic papers in internet cites like Google Scholar or Ebsco Host and led to development of new technologies and enhanching people’s knowledge about the fields they are working. For example vaccine production is a cumulative result of scientist’s research and information. If there was not that much information flowing around, the progresses in almost every field would slow down dramatically which would cause plenty of difficulties in modern life. However, I believe if every type of information is easily accesible by everyone that may cause more drawbacks than advantages. The reason for this is that the validity of information will be very difficult to control and there may be violations of privacy. For example if someone attempted a suicide the details shouldn’t announce to society for public mental health and privacy of the person. But unfortunately I witnessed plenty of bleaches in Twitter and other social media platforms. If we let sensitive informations to be spread around the world there will be some legal penalties about violation of privacy. In conclusion, although it is of critical importance that distribution of information should be maximized I believe that the privacy of people should not be violated during these procedures
Firstly
, it is vital for
people
to be able to access platforms to share
information
so
it will create a network and
information
flow between the researches. This
is provided
by the citations of academic papers in internet cites like Google Scholar or
Ebsco
Host and led to development of new technologies and
enhanching
people
’s knowledge about the fields they are working.
For example
vaccine production is a cumulative result of scientist’s research and
information
. If there was not that much
information
flowing around, the progresses in almost every field would slow down
dramatically
which would cause
plenty
of difficulties in modern life.

However
, I believe if every type of
information
is
easily
accesible
by everyone that may cause more drawbacks than advantages.
The reason for this is
that the validity of
information
will be
very
difficult to control and there may be violations of privacy.
For example
if someone attempted a suicide the
details
shouldn’t announce to society for public mental health and privacy of the person.
But
unfortunately I witnessed
plenty
of bleaches
in Twitter
and other social media platforms.
If
we
let
sensitive
informations
to
be spread
around the world there will be
some
legal penalties about violation of privacy.

In conclusion
, although it is of critical importance that distribution of
information
should
be maximized
I believe that the privacy of
people
should not
be violated
during these procedures
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IELTS essay some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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