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Some people believe that it is better to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is better to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. 5JKP
In a fast paced world, every individual has to face the problems in their daily life. Some people think that it is good to improve their condition by doing new things. However, others think that it is best thing to compromise with the unfavourable situation. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and gives my opinion, before any conclusion is drawn. On the one hand, there were a few people who believe in fate. They leaves the situation in the favour of God. What ever it may be either good or bad, they have a belief that we have to accept this condition and it is unchanged. Moreover, the educated people also started to believe in superstitions and they are not welcoming the favourable things in their lives to get rid of the problems. For instance, many of the young adults are leading their life wit unsatisfaction job, even though they are receiving low compensation. Hence, they feel that instead of getting worse by doing new things, it is better to continue with the same. On the other hand, there are many individuals who does not feel satisfaction with the current situation and wanting a new change in their life. They not compromise with the problem, and it will be dealt in a special manner to get rid of those difficulties. Furthermore, every individual will hope for a better future inspite of facing challenges. For example, Indian Government has started an new innovative programme for the people who want to improve their condition by attempting new things and leads to discoveries (inventions). Therefore, grab every opportunity to get successful in the life, with commitment and devotion. In my opinion, we might act according to the situation and make step forward. If the condition is favourable for us, we might accept the risk and move on to achieve anything. In contrast, if it if unachieveable, we must stay calm and act accordingly. To conclude, this is a significant thing to identify the problem and finding a solution to it. In addition, not all bad situations need to be ignored and not all needs to be improved. Think wisely to get the best solution for all your difficulties.
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face the
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problems
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life
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think
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improve
their
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condition
by doing
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new
things.
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, others
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think
that it
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is best
thing to compromise with the
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unfavourable
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situation
. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and gives my opinion,
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before
any conclusion
is drawn
.

On the one hand, there were a few
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people
who believe in fate. They
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leaves
the
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situation
in the
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favour
of God. What ever it may be either
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good
or
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bad
, they have a belief that we
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have to
accept this
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condition
and it
is unchanged
.
Moreover
, the educated
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people
also
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started
to believe in
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superstitions and
they are not welcoming the
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favourable
things in their
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lives
to
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get
rid of the
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problems
.
For instance
,
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many
of the young adults are leading their
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life
wit unsatisfaction job,
even though
they are receiving low compensation.
Hence
, they feel that
instead
of getting worse by doing
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new
things, it is better to continue with the same.

On the other hand
, there are
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many
individuals who
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does
not feel satisfaction with the
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current
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situation
and wanting a
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new
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change
in their
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life
. They not compromise with the
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problem
, and it will
be dealt
in a special manner to
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get
rid of those difficulties.
Furthermore
, every individual will hope for a better future
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inspite
of facing challenges.
For example
, Indian
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Government
has
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started
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an
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new
innovative
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programme
for the
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people
who want to
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improve
their
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condition
by attempting
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new
things and leads to discoveries (inventions).
Therefore
, grab every opportunity to
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get
successful in the
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life
, with commitment and devotion.

In my opinion, we might act according to the
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situation
and
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make
step forward. If the
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condition
is
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favourable
for us, we might accept the
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risk
and
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move
on to achieve anything.
In contrast
, if it
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if
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unachieveable
, we
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must
stay calm and act
accordingly
.

To conclude
, this is a significant thing to identify the
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problem
and finding a solution to it.
In addition
, not all
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bad
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situations
need to be
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ignored
and not all needs to be
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improved
.
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wisely
to
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get
the best solution for all your difficulties.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is better to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

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  American English
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370 words
6.0
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