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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

People have different views about whether they have to accept negative circumstances when they accrue or they should seek solutions in such situations. While I accept some situations are unchangeable and it is more realistic to accept them, I believe we are able to improve many bad happenings or situations. On one hand, some people just accept the negative circumstances and I think there are two main reasons why they comply with that and doesn't make any attempts to improve the situation. first, they see these situations as their fates which is inevitable. They even convince themselves that it may some positive implications for them in some point in future. For example my uncle, despite of having many job opportunities, doesn't look for a better job. He has just admitted that is what destiny for him. Secondly, they have a great fear that their attempts could lead to the more costly failures and they would be disappointed. On the other hand, some other people, like me, have a more proactive vision and believe that the most difficult situation are improvable only if we continued our efforts and don't give up. perhaps the best example for that are the postwar countries like Germany, Japan, South Korea and etc. all these countries were devastated by war greater or lesser degree, but we can see they all are economic powerhouses today. Furthermore, I think even if a little improvement happen in result of our attempts. It will bring us an incredible sense of satisfaction and self-confidence that will definitely help us in other hard situations. In conclusion, although there are some difficult circumstances that some people believe just should be accepted but I believe we must never give up trying to make an improvement.
People
have
different
views about whether they
have to
accept
negative
circumstances when they
accrue or
they should seek solutions in such
situations
. While I
accept
some
situations
are
unchangeable and
it is more realistic to
accept
them, I
believe
we are able to
improve
many
bad
happenings or situations.

On one hand,
some
people
just
accept
the
negative
circumstances and I
think
there are two main reasons why they comply with that and doesn't
make
any attempts to
improve
the
situation
.
first
, they
see
these
situations
as their fates which is inevitable. They even convince themselves that it may
some
positive
implications for them in
some
point
in future
.
For example
my uncle,
despite of
having
many
job opportunities, doesn't look for a better job. He has
just
admitted
that is
what destiny for him.
Secondly
, they have a great fear that their attempts could lead to the more costly
failures and
they would
be disappointed
.

On the other hand
,
some
other
people
, like me, have a more proactive vision and
believe
that the most difficult
situation
are improvable
only
if we continued our efforts and don't give up. perhaps the best example for that are the postwar countries like Germany, Japan, South Korea
and etc
. all these countries
were devastated
by war greater or lesser degree,
but
we can
see
they all are economic powerhouses
today
.
Furthermore
, I
think
even if a
little
improvement happen in result of our attempts. It will bring us an incredible sense of satisfaction and self-confidence that will definitely
help
us in other
hard
situations.

In conclusion
, although there are
some
difficult circumstances that
some
people
believe
just
should be
accepted
but
I
believe
we
must
never give up trying to
make
an improvement.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6.0
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