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Some people believe that famine is caused by climate change and preventing this will stop famine. What is your view of this? At least 250 words.

Starvation is one of the most urgent problems that need to be solved in near future. It is thought that climate change leads to a lack of food and preventing it will end the famine. I agree with the statement given as the impacts of the climate change process is global. First of all, global warming caused by human activities, such as burning fossil fuels or cutting down forests has many consequences for our planet. Effects of high temperatures and increased amount of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere already noticeable on crop growth. For example, melting glaciers and consequently raised sea levels are causing floods that damage crops. In areas where people have lived thanks to crop production, floods left them without food. Secondly, another major impact of climate change is droughts which also have influences on the level of starvation. Droughts are the main cause of crop losses, as there is not enough water to grow plants. Furthermore, the increasing temperature on the surface of Earth also contributes to famine because extreme heat damages plants and some vital processes like photosynthesis. This leads to the loss of crops, which is terrible for the local population. To sum up, weather events caused by humans are the main source of threat for the food industry. The effects of climate change are everywhere around us, one of the challenges is famine. I believe, reducing some serious impacts of global warming will stop the world's food shortages. The most important thing is just don't make the situation worse.
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be solved
in near future. It is
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leads to a lack of food and preventing it will
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end
the famine. I
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agree
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as the impacts of the
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process is global.

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First of all
, global warming caused by human activities, such as burning fossil fuels or cutting down forests has
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many
consequences for our planet. Effects of high temperatures and increased amount of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere already noticeable on
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crop
growth.
For example
, melting glaciers and
consequently
raised sea levels are causing floods that damage
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crops
. In areas where
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people
have
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lived
thanks to
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production, floods
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left
them without food.

Secondly
, another major impact of
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climate
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change
is droughts which
also
have influences on the level of starvation. Droughts are the main cause of
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crop
losses, as there is not
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enough
water to grow plants.
Furthermore
, the increasing temperature on the surface of Earth
also
contributes to famine
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because
extreme heat damages plants and
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some
vital processes like photosynthesis. This leads to the loss of
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crops
, which is terrible for the local population.

To sum up, weather
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events
caused by humans are the main source of threat for the food industry. The effects of
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climate
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change
are everywhere around us, one of the challenges is famine. I believe, reducing
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some
serious impacts of global warming will
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stop
the world's food shortages. The most
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important
thing is
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just
don't
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make
the situation worse.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that famine is caused by climate change and preventing this will stop famine. What is your view of this? At least 250 words.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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