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Some people believe that excessive use of modern technologies, such as computers and smartphones, is negatively affecting the reading and writing skills of our young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that excessive use of modern technologies, such as computers and smartphones, is negatively affecting the reading and writing skills of our young people. 2VVA
Parents and teachers in many countries are feeling increasingly concerned about the effect of digital devices on vital skills of school-aged children. They are alarmed by the declining ability of young people to read and write and its suspected link to the influence of modern technology, and I wholeheartedly share their view. This essay will outline the reasons to watch out for the consequences of widespread use of computers and mobile phones by our youngsters. Primary school is a very important period when children develop their fine motor skills, which are involved in learning to write. Time spent typing on a mobile phone or a tablet doesn’t contribute to the necessary workout of the small muscles in the hands and fingers of young people. Not only do they get less practice in writing but also fewer opportunities to train in spelling words, since the ‘autocorrect’ and ‘autocomplete’ features use the first few letters to guess the entire word, therefore making it unnecessary for the child to remember and type it correctly. Another companion of unrestrained use of mobile devices is the jargon that is often used in text messages, where words are shortened or distorted. Exposure to ‘texting’ tends to replace the correct words with abbreviations in young minds, causing their spelling accuracy to decline. Reading is another casualty of unrestricted access to smart devices. Video content can be more appealing and immersive for kids and they often are automatically drawn to it instead of books. Reading requires regular practice and needs to become a habit in order to fully develop as a skill; however, it is being perceived as a boring and labourious activity by many youngsters compared to effortless video-watching. Easy and instant access to videos and movies pushes books further down the list of preferences of young audience, and it takes a significant commitment from parents and teachers to ensure that children continue to read books. To sum up, modern technology can be a friend or a foe for young children, depending on the choices adults in their lives make, regulating the amount of screen time and its purpose. Without due care the writing and reading abilities of kids can be harmed by other, more enjoyable activities they can use the devices for
Parents and teachers in
many
countries are feeling
increasingly
concerned about the effect of digital
devices
on vital
skills
of school-aged
children
. They
are alarmed
by the declining ability of
young
people
to read and write and its suspected link to the influence of modern technology, and I
wholeheartedly
share their view. This essay will outline the reasons to
watch
out for the consequences of widespread
use
of computers and mobile phones by our youngsters.

Primary school is a
very
important
period when
children
develop their fine motor
skills
, which
are involved
in learning to write. Time spent typing on a mobile phone or a tablet doesn’t contribute to the necessary workout of the
small
muscles in the hands and fingers of
young
people
. Not
only
do they
get
less practice in writing
but
also
fewer opportunities to train in spelling words, since the ‘autocorrect’ and ‘autocomplete’ features
use
the
first
few letters to guess the entire
word
,
therefore
making it unnecessary for the child to remember and type it
correctly
. Another companion of unrestrained
use
of mobile
devices
is the jargon
that is
often
used
in text messages, where words
are shortened
or distorted. Exposure to ‘texting’ tends to replace the correct words with abbreviations in
young
minds, causing their spelling accuracy to decline.

Reading is another casualty of unrestricted access to smart
devices
. Video content can be more appealing and immersive for
kids and
they
often are
automatically
drawn to it
instead
of books. Reading requires regular practice and needs to become a habit in order to
fully
develop as a
skill
;
however
, it is
being perceived
as a boring and
labourious
activity by
many
youngsters compared to effortless video-watching. Easy and instant access to videos and movies pushes books
further
down the list of preferences of
young
audience, and it takes a significant commitment from parents and teachers to ensure that
children
continue to read books.

To sum up, modern technology can be a friend or a foe for
young
children
, depending on the choices adults in their
lives
make
, regulating the amount of screen time and its purpose. Without due care the writing and reading abilities of kids can
be harmed
by other, more enjoyable activities they can
use
the
devices
for
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IELTS essay Some people believe that excessive use of modern technologies, such as computers and smartphones, is negatively affecting the reading and writing skills of our young people.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
375 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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