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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion? v.15

Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion? v. 15
While it is true that in many nations of people have lots of engaged in travelling, because it has become a major part in their life. At present, more and more individuals liking travel from one place to another place than last few decades. There are many reasons behind this phenomenon. I deem that travelling has enough of advantages for the holiday makers. I will discuss the certain reasons and some advantages of travelling in the below paragraphs. To start with there are two major factors which help to explain ideas why travelling is becoming more popular than in the past time. First reason is that people know very well, in the before time people had less interest in travelling, as they most liked to earn the money for fulfilling the needs of their family members. Because of this they had to work hard around the clock. Owing to this circumstance, they had no time for travelling. However, now the trend of this has varied in many ways. Technology has become faster, convenient, easier with the advents of current features. Namely transportation, which saves the time of the people. Nevertheless, people love travelling. Secondly, it has become enjoyable for their travellers. To illustrate, even if a person working in a big company at present. He or she gets promotions from their companies in order to go one place to another place either seven or a month with family, which the way of the this is an affordable. On the contrary side, it is impossible last few decades. Due to, people tend to travel in their life. In spite of the causes, there are more advantages of departing for the passengers. First and foremost benefit is that it helps to provide the opportunity to make new friends. For instance, when a person moves to another country in life. As a result, he or she meets new friends, who belong to other traditions. From those people he gets a chance to see their culture, conventional items of their country, lifestyles, foods and many more. In addition to it, travellers get an opportunity to have a national identity of their country, where they are able to live for a long time as well as learn about languages, which helps to stay connected with other people. It uses to enhance the in depth of knowledge for the layman. To sum up, even though moving one region to another region has more reasons, yet while travelling has been many advantages for the trippers. I judge that it is playing a considerable role in everyone's life as well as very beneficial to increase the knowledge.
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many
nations of
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people
have lots of engaged in
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travelling
,
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because
it has become a major part in their life. At present, more and more individuals liking travel from one
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place
to another
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place
than last few decades. There are
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many
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reasons
behind this phenomenon. I deem that
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travelling
has
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enough
of
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advantages
for the holiday makers. I will discuss the certain
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reasons
and
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some
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advantages
of
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in the below paragraphs.

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with there are two major factors which
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help
to
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explain
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ideas
why
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travelling
is becoming more popular than in the past
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time
.
First
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reason
is that
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people
know
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very
well, in the
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before
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time
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people
had less interest in
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travelling
, as they most liked to earn the money for fulfilling the needs of their family members.
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of this they had to work
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hard
around the clock. Owing to this circumstance, they had no
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time
for
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travelling
.
However
,
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now
the trend of this has varied in
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many
ways. Technology has become faster, convenient, easier with the advents of
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current
features.
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Namely
transportation, which saves the
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time
of the
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people
.
Nevertheless
,
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people
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love
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travelling
.
Secondly
, it has become enjoyable for their
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travellers
. To illustrate, even if a person working in a
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big
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company
at present. He or she
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gets
promotions from their
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companies
in order to go one
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place
to another
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place
either seven or a month with family, which the way of
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the this
is
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an affordable
.
On the contrary
side, it is impossible last few decades. Due to,
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people
tend to travel in their life.

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In spite of
the causes, there are more
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advantages
of departing for the passengers.
First
and foremost benefit is that it
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helps
to provide the opportunity to
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make
new friends.
For instance
, when a person
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moves
to another country in life.
As a result
, he or she meets new friends, who belong to other traditions. From those
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people
he
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gets
a chance to
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see
their culture, conventional items of their country, lifestyles, foods and
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many
more.
In addition
to it,
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travellers
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get
an opportunity to have a national identity of their country, where they are able to
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live
for a long
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time
as well
as learn about languages, which
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helps
to stay connected with other
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people
. It
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uses
to enhance the in depth of knowledge for the layman.

To sum up,
even though
moving one region to another region has more
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reasons
,
yet
while
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travelling
has been
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many
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advantages
for the trippers. I judge that it is playing a considerable role in everyone's life
as well
as
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very
beneficial to increase the knowledge.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion? v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
439 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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