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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by Artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion? v.14

Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by Artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion? v. 14
Artificially intelligent machines are replacing humans in the workforce shortly. However, the robots can indeed do some of the jobs but, some other works, need a human presence. This essay will discuss why some of the functions should rely on humans rather than on robots. In nearly future, the robots will take over the tasks that do not need complex or critical professional skills. Accurately programmed robots can execute the work more smoothly than humans also without errors. For example, an automated teller machine for deposit and withdraw money in no time that tremendously eradicated human inversions. For these reasons, the artificially intelligent robots or computers will substitute humans in some areas. There are still some tasks that need human talents for proper functioning. The areas like medical, social, and physiology need to be carried out by skilled people furthermore, some fields need crucial and critical decisions that are only being possible by human interaction. Robots are pre-programmed machines so they cannot take decisions on such situations that they are not programmed. For instance, in the medical field, the foremost surgeries are carried out by doctors themselves, even though there are humanoids to do minor. Based on this, there exist some jobs where cyborgs cannot replace people. In conclusion, humanoids will potentially succeed humans in the most workforce. However, the areas need critical thinking as well as a crucial decision will be performed only by humans. In my opinion, there are some work sectors where human presence is necessary moreover humanoids are man-made things.
Artificially
intelligent machines are replacing
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humans
in the workforce shortly.
However
, the robots can
indeed
do
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some of the
jobs
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but
,
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some
other works,
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need
a
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human
presence. This essay will discuss why
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some of the
functions should rely on
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humans
rather
than on robots.

In
nearly
future, the robots will take over the tasks that do not
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need
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complex
or critical professional
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skills
.
Accurately
programmed robots can execute the work more
smoothly
than
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humans
also
without errors.
For example
, an automated teller machine for deposit and withdraw money in no time that
tremendously
eradicated
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human
inversions. For these reasons, the
artificially
intelligent robots or computers will substitute
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humans
in
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some
areas.

There are
still
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some
tasks that
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need
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human
talents for proper functioning. The areas like medical, social, and physiology
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need
to
be carried
out by skilled
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people
furthermore
,
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some
fields
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need
crucial and critical decisions that are
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only
being possible by
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human
interaction. Robots are
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pre-programmed
machines
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so
they cannot take decisions on such situations that they are not programmed.
For instance
, in the medical field, the foremost surgeries
are carried
out by doctors themselves,
even though
there are humanoids to do minor. Based on this, there exist
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some
jobs where cyborgs cannot replace
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people
.

In conclusion
, humanoids will
potentially
succeed
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humans
in the most workforce.
However
, the areas
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need
critical thinking
as well
as a crucial decision will
be performed
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only
by
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humans
. In my opinion, there are
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some
work sectors where
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human
presence is necessary
moreover
humanoids are
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man
-made things.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by Artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion? v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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