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Some people believe that children should growth in a city,other think parents should growing Children in countryside. Discuss both view and give you opinion.

Some people believe that children should growth in a city, other think parents should growing Children in countryside. x2nwg
People have difficult views with effectiveness. A group of people argue taht parents should provides chance for children to living city life, while other believe it would be better to children growth in rural area. However, i strongly believe though some negative impact living in city, but cities life much better rather than village and in the following paragraphs i will try to prove may choice with logical explanation. On the one hand, there are are a number of good reasons that why some individuals argue that parents should be growth children in urban area. Firstly, a big city proves many facilities for their residents, students allow to get chance read high level schools, collages, universities which almost impossible in the rural area. Knowing more students would be creative which help them for the future. Secondly, enjoy different entertainment like cinema, picnic, and many more. Moreover, if any students feel any diseases can find nearest hospital easily which find in countryside very difficulty. What is more, they can live luxury life. On the other hand, some negative impacts in cities life that why other think village life much more better than urban side. First and foremost, nowadays, big cities environment quality is so poor air and water polluted often because in the cities rapidly growth mills, industries, and vehicles as a result often pollution. In addition, crime rate in cities much more than village, many children in the cities involved big crime it would be risk for children to growth in city. In conclusion, it is true cities people have to face some problem, but living cities bright side is much more than down side so, I state on my opinion that parents should be get opportunity to children growing city.
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argue
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taht
parents should
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provides
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life
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children
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growth
in rural area.
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i
strongly
believe though
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impact living in city,
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cities
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life
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much
better
rather
than village and in the following paragraphs
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i
will try to prove may choice with logical explanation.

On the one hand, there
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are are
a number of
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good
reasons that why
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some
individuals argue that parents should be
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growth
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children
in urban area.
Firstly
, a
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big
city proves
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many
facilities for their residents, students
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to
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chance read high level schools, collages, universities which almost impossible in the rural area. Knowing more students would be creative which
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help
them for the future.
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, enjoy
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entertainment like cinema, picnic, and
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many
more.
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, if any students feel any diseases can find
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hospital
easily
which find in countryside
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difficulty.
What is more
, they can
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live
luxury life.

On the other hand
,
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impacts in
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cities
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that why other
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village
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life
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more better
than urban side.
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and foremost, nowadays,
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cities
environment quality is
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poor air and water polluted
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often
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in the
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rapidly
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mills, industries, and vehicles
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pollution.
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, crime rate in
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much
more than village,
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in the
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involved
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crime it would be
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children
to
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growth
in city.

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, it is true
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cities
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face
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problem,
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living
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bright side is
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more than
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down side
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so
, I state on my opinion that parents should be
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get
opportunity to
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children
growing city.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that children should growth in a city, other think parents should growing Children in countryside.

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