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Some people believe that children can learn effectively by watching TV and they should be encouraged to watch TV both at home and school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that children can learn effectively by watching TV and they should be encouraged to watch TV both at home and school. Lgo1
Some people possess belief that kids are able to study productively by seeing television and they should be stimulated to watch television at house and school as well. This essay strongly agrees that, to promote this activity is not a good idea. Firstly, this essay will discuss the drawbacks of encouraging the children to watch television mostly and secondly, the benefits of watching television for them. On the one hand, some people think that to watch television is important for children and it must be foster in them for all time but it is toply wrong idea. To view violent acts on television is bad for kids so they are more likely to show aggressive behaviour to others. Characters on television and in video games often depict risky behaviours, such as smoking and drinking, and also reinforce gender-role and racial stereotypes. Children who consistently spend more than 4 hours per day watching television are more likely to be overweight. World Health Organization reported in 2019 that, 2 out of 5 children suffered from obesity and one of the reasons from this problem included watching television mostly. On the other hand, television and other electronic media can get in the way of exploring, playing, and interacting with parents and others, which encourages learning and healthy physical and social development. Watching television with your kids allows parents to get a check the content of what they are viewing and allows parents to provide input, guidance and perspective on what they are seeing. Children who watch educational programs on television learn more from the material than children who view without co-viewing visual. Many of the movies and television programmes are based on books. Children enjoy learning activities more if it involves their favourite characters. Television characters can be very motivating especially for younger children. According to surveys conducted by the Kaiser Family Foundation, 70% of families with children gained success throughout the school years. In conclusion, in order to be successful and possess some beneficial skills, parents should make their kids to watch some television programmes, while demerits of watching television regularly and unintentionally can cause some harms both for their body and can lead to some difficulties in their educational life.
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possess belief that
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kids
are able to study
productively
by seeing
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television and
they should
be stimulated
to
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watch
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television
at
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house
and school
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. This essay
strongly
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agrees
that, to promote this activity is not a
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good
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idea
.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss the drawbacks of encouraging the
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children
to
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watch
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television
mostly
and
secondly
, the benefits of watching
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television
for them.

On the one hand,
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people
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that to
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television
is
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important
for
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children
and it
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be foster in them for all time
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it is
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toply
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wrong
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idea
. To view violent acts on
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television
is
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bad
for
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kids
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so
they are more likely to
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show
aggressive
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behaviour
to others. Characters on
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television
and in video games
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often
depict risky
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behaviours
, such as smoking and drinking, and
also
reinforce gender-role and racial stereotypes.
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Children
who
consistently
spend more than 4 hours per day watching
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television
are more likely to be overweight. World Health Organization reported in 2019 that, 2 out of 5
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children
suffered from obesity and one of the reasons from this problem included watching
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television
mostly
.

On the
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other
hand,
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television
and
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other
electronic media can
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get
in the way of exploring, playing, and interacting with
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parents
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and others
, which encourages learning and healthy physical and social development. Watching
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television
with your
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kids
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allows
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parents
to
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get
a
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check
the content of what they are viewing and
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allows
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parents
to provide input, guidance and perspective on what they are seeing.
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Children
who
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watch
educational programs on
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television
learn more from the material than
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children
who view without co-viewing visual.
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Many
of the movies and
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television
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programmes
are based
on books.
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Children
enjoy learning activities more if it involves their
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favourite
characters.
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Television
characters can be
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very
motivating
especially
for younger
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children
. According to surveys conducted by the Kaiser Family Foundation, 70% of families with
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children
gained success throughout the school years.

In conclusion
, in order to be successful and possess
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some
beneficial
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skills
,
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parents
should
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make
their
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kids
to
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watch
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some
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television
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programmes
, while demerits of watching
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television
regularly
and
unintentionally
can cause
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some
harms both for their body and can lead to
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some
difficulties in their educational life.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that children can learn effectively by watching TV and they should be encouraged to watch TV both at home and school.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
369 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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