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Some people believe if a police force carries a guns, it will encourage the level of violence in the society. To what extent you agree or disagess

Some people believe if a police force carries a guns, it will encourage the level of violence in the society. To what extent you agree or disagess 0AlRQ
It is believed that the police equipping guns is likely to contribute to more violence. However, I disagree with this opinion as I think this phenomenon will alleviate violence in society. Firstly, it will curb crimes. Some criminals commit crimes because they think police do not have threats to them. For example, If police can carry guns, those who are on the edge of crimes or violence will consider the consequence and know such misbehaviours like bullying and robbery are definitely not be allowed. More importantly, they will realize it is difficult for them to commit crimes, which could have a deterrent effect on using violence and commit crimes, improving the safety of our society. Therefore, this could alleviate violent cases and maintain stability. Another benefit is that it is useful for the police to arrest someone who poses a series of dangers to the public. It is common to see that lots of offenders who haven’t been put into prison are one of the causes of our society’s disorder. For instance, If the police could use guns when they are arresting those offenders, they can shoot those who are escaping, which will ensure the success of catching culprits, let them be punished. As a result, the number of people who intends to use violence in society will get arrested and be put into prison, contributing to a safe society. In conclusion, the police using guns could curb violence because it could deter people from violating the law and reduce criminals escaping from the arrest.
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is believed
that the
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equipping
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is likely to contribute to more
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violence
.
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think
this phenomenon will alleviate
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violence
in society.

Firstly
, it will curb
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.
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criminals commit
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crimes
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because
they
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think
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police
do not have threats to them.
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, If
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police
can carry
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guns
, those
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who
are on the edge of
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crimes
or
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violence
will consider the consequence and know such
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misbehaviours
like bullying and robbery are definitely not be
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allowed
. More
importantly
, they will realize it is difficult for them to commit
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crimes
, which could have a deterrent effect on using
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violence
and commit
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crimes
, improving the safety of our society.
Therefore
, this could alleviate violent cases and maintain stability.

Another benefit is that it is useful for the
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police
to arrest someone
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who
poses a series of
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dangers
to the public. It is common to
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see
that lots of offenders
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who
haven’t
been put
into prison are one of the causes of our society’s disorder.
For instance
, If the
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police
could
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use
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guns
when they are arresting those offenders, they can shoot those
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who
are escaping, which will ensure the success of catching culprits,
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let
them
be punished
.
As a result
, the number of
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people
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who
intends to
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use
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in society will
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get
arrested and
be put
into prison, contributing to a safe society.

In conclusion
, the
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using
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could curb
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violence
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because
it could deter
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people
from violating the law and
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reduce
criminals escaping from the arrest.
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IELTS essay Some people believe if a police force carries a guns, it will encourage the level of violence in the society. To what extent you agree or disagess

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255 words
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