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Some people argue that technological innovations , such as, mobile phones are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

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Owing to the advancement in technology, people are using different modern devices in their daily life. Some people think that technological resources like mobile phones are making distance between individuals. This essay will explain both advantages and disadvantages of mobile phones. My views will be scrutinized in upcoming paragraphs. At the outset, there are various negative impacts of mobile phones on relationships. Firstly,
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people
are using
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different
modern devices in their daily life.
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Some
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people
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think
that technological resources like mobile phones are making distance between individuals. This essay will
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explain
both advantages and disadvantages of mobile phones. My views will
be scrutinized
in upcoming paragraphs.

At the outset, there are various
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negative
impacts of mobile phones on relationships.
Firstly
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IELTS essay Some people argue that technological innovations, such as, mobile phones are making people socially less interactive.

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  American English
2 paragraphs
63 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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